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Saul_Wiscovich
Waste of time. This is basicly a bashing story with no redeeming qualities.
So I will just leave this review and move on to better things.
Just hope this author gets better at fleshing out characters.
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Yeimi_Quezada
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Bob_Uchiha_XD
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leona_courtney_9204
i love it.
that's it.
i think the way he look's is really cool and i like his just go with it personality i also like all the facts and details you've added in that are different from the original.
i really really like it so please don't rewrite it or anything it perfect the way it is
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SOMBRIO
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TigerOfTheWest
I liked the story in the beginning, but you ruined it when you decided on the split personality. It got annoying instantly. Very unfortunate, because the premise of the story was quite interesting.
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Slightly_Average
It's... interesting... slightly okay out of excellent. Review DoneReview DoneReview Done RReview DoneReview DoneReview DoneReview DoneReview DoneReview Done
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Dark_B3rry
It was good, to the point you split his core in half and made him weaker.
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panren_soul
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orion06
the writing quality is a 4 out of 5. pretty good and easy to understand.
the story development is a 1 out of 5 super slow and random. he just randomly gets half his core split and it's not explained if it's just his current magic, his magic potential or something else, jsut that is is split
the character design is 1out of 5. characters change opinions just because. they have no feel to it and it seems very plain.
updating stability is a 1 out of 5
not updated in the last month.
the world back ground is a 2 because it's just changing the hp world but some of it seems weird like number thing.
overall a 2. poor story
also this is just what I feel no need to comment about what you feel. make a new review if you have different opinion rather then replying. GG
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_Kuro_Neko_
Overall, this story is one of the best Harry Potter Fanfictions ever made, and it’s pretty sad that the author abandoned it....
The Main Character is very abnormal compared with other fanfictions’ MC’s- he doesn’t go with the current, he goes against it.
Ps: Spoiler!!! The two-people-in-One thing going on with the MC is VERY COOL!!! I mean, haven’t we all wondered where the soul of the person that the MC has taken over went? Well, this story answers that question in a rather bizarre (and very cool) way!
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Aeternabilis
What ruins this story completely is the split personality and the split magic core. It was fine up to that point, however, I despise stories like this. I thought that they would merge straight away and make the soul strength double or something. But now we have an extra constantly talking in his head...
The split-core makes no sense either. I get if it halved his magic but you split it light and dark. Magic is magic... there is no light and dark side this isn't fcking StarWars xD
Spells can have an element but magic is magic...
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Ken_Uzumaki
Just from reading the summary alone sounds very interesting, can't wait to see what this story has to offer I expect great things, and a plot that's around the main plot.
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DiperZ
Si quieres un mc que piensa mucho pero hace una mierda y que está nerfeado con la mitad de su poder por la gracias del autor esto es para ti sino pues a la mierda
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Aiden_Dover
Im giving five stars just for that summary but if its interesting and i like it ill give another good review.
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Loyal_Hunter
Fun to read, has quite a few interesting concepts, there's no real bad points that I don't like, I enjoyed reading so far.
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usui1202
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Loyal_Hunter
It's been fun to read so far but why is this in the Novel Section and not the Fanfic section?
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LUCIFER_20
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SAM_NZ_1127
QUITE A UNIQUE HARRY POTTER FANFICTION THAT I HAVE READ UP TILL NOW . A VERY GOOD BOOK A MUST READ.👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
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WesternGod
Pretty good work so far. I'm only at chapter five, but it has decent elements of development and comedy. The writing quality is readable, but could use some revision.
Overall, I'd say the story is well paced, but I'd like to see more magic development in the upcoming chapters. For prospective readers, you should know this is kind of like a slice of life story. It starts slow, but feels like it's progressing well.
Thanks for the read!👍
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