Chapter comments on the chapter The Day the Earth changed (Part-1) of the book A technomancer’s journey in an apocalyptic world

Damn if this chapter is from real life then damn damn damn what kind of **** parents are those

Interesting synopsis, unfortunate that it's so difficult to get through the first chapter. Like seriously wtf is this grammar, sentence structure and just overall start to a story... He's complaining about his sisters and neglectful parents then turns around and announces the success he's had on his own? I don't really get it, the parents behaviour as well as the sisters is so cartoonish and wild that it just isn't feasibly believable. Had they been purposefully pranking him and just being c*nt biscuits then turn around their attitudes as soon as their parents were present then sure but they blatantly disrespect him infront of the hired help and parents so I don't get why he'd bother staying around for as long as he did seeing as apparently he's a 'genius'. Ironically the family dynamic is just about as believable as the MC's power down the line and its usefulness in an era of shut down factories/power plants. Either way it's a meh and eventually if it is dropped then rewritten I'd suggest not going the super jealous, hateful and petty MC it's a turn off. Especially when the English is so trash and his motivations to be so jaded is so childish.

The prose and character establishment is good, but the punctuation needs work. There are commas where full stops should be with no commas where they need to be. The punctuation is just really bad in general but, other than that, the quality of writing is good.

this chapter is kinda stupid if the mc suppose to be some kind of child, prodigy that got born into a rich family his parents definitely wouldn't have treated,him like that because most rich kids are spoiled by their parents especially, if they turn out to be geniuses and a another thing how did they not know about all the mc accomplishments, in sports you know if a boy wants to join a sport team in their school, be it football basketball or any other sport they would need their parents to sign a permission slip, or else he wouldn't have been able to join any team. and the part were the mc explained how some random kid lied and said the mc stole his Trophies and his mother forced him to give them up is especially, dumb considering that the mc has so many ways to prove that the Trophies are his he could just bring over his teammates or better yet his coach, to explain that his the rightful owner of does Trophies am going to keep reading this but this began on a really stupid, fashion if the mc was some loser who wasn't good at sports and who wasn't that smart,and had terrible grades it would make sense for his parents being the wealthy, social elites that they are to look down on him and see him as a disappointment, but this Author give no reason why his parents never trusted or believed him. I kinda get why his sisters were mean to him it's obviously because they were jealous of him but that wasn't stated in the story, instead the Author made it seems like the mc sisters were bullying him just because it was fun or something which is so stupid I hope this story gets better, and how did the mc get emancipated from his parents just because his father secretary, signed the papers that beyond stupid and definitely wouldn't work in real life,one of his parents needs to sign the papers for it to be valid and why did she look down on the mc so much,she has no right of reason to since the mc is literally superior to her in every way man this story. 🤷‍♂️

This is one of the worst opening chapter I have read in a while both in its narrative structure and plot. The most common practice used in most stories is a simple show and don't tell. You don't give an info dump who the MC is. It is better if the reader is the one that judges if the MC is awesome, not just because you wrote a bunch of stuff saying he is. Plotwise on the other hand, is full of holes so large I am surprised why few have commented on it but I think they simply dropped it and moved on. I read a comment from the author that he based it on a family that he knew, which I suspect he wasn't particularly close. For one, even if another sibling has everything while the other doesn't, it does not automatically mean the sibling with the silver tonged is crap, he/she might actually have some capabilities themselves since not everyone is as gullible. If the sibling is a simple parasite, it is frankly quite obvious to outsiders since achievements and skills speak for themselves. That is why this first chapter fails horribly at it since logic has left the building. For one, the MC is a prodigy, top of the entire country in grades, full scholar and part of his school's varsity team but he is heavily bullied by his older sisters and their friends. As if you can bully someone from the varsity team, they bully you. You also can't bully the top student since they are most likely a teacher's pet and would be heavily protected since he basically raises the school's reputation by simply being enrolled and standing at the top of the national exams. MC's family, from what I gather, is very rich, and very vain. Then it stands to reason that they would like gossips and the like so the news of them having a genius son would have made the other parents kiss their ass so much that there was no way they could have believed a child over their peers just because they were their children. Or maybe MC's parents don't socialize, high society parties and all that, they have no need to flex their wealth, I mean they're not vain right? How did MC's parents become rich? They believed a kid without investigating anything just because the kid said so, and it wasn't even their child. If they were that gullible, someone would have gotten all their wealth already. As I said in the above, the person who has a silver tonged must have some level of skill and most probably, a bit better than you. If not, no matter how skilled they are in bending the truth, results will show an entirely different story but since the parents are completely inept that believes anything that anyone says other than the MC. I mean, MC had evidence but nope, still believes others over him. How the hell are they successful again? And one last thing, why the hell would his parents still want him? They all seem to hate him for no apparent reason other than a scapegoat. It includes even their family servants and employees. Zero logic is being applied to the parents trying to make him stay when they don't even remember his birthday or graduation. It was completely and utterly illogical, as if it was added only to fuel the MC's "awesomeness" with a bit of face slapping. Author should rewrite this part if you are planning for it to be long. It's better to introduce the other characters through their actions rather than the MC giving us a rundown. ** : I will still be reading it since... TECHNOMANCER!!!

So far so good

well i hope something like this don`t exist in reality bc thats insane.

That's rather absurdly miserable, almost as bad as this chapters grammar...

Thise parents are shit

I read this same Situation from a naruto neglect Fanfiction they explained it by the pArents being under a genjuTsu or something How are you gonna explain this tho

I dont get it why everybody hates him or doesnt give a shit about when hes a prodigy or why does the parents frickin love so much the sisters and why the heck they would care if the mc would leave them when they didnt a give a shit about for 15yrs But meh I like the chap That was a frickin deep past so ye **** that plot holes

Uhhh, so we are supposed to dislike the MC at the start of the story?

this is really confusing to read

oof that was super cathartic to read

Plot twist the author actually experieNce this but didnt have the courage to leave the family

There are several run-on sentences...

Quite nice, jumps into full gear straight away, argueably to fast but nice.

Thanks for the chapter ! 😁👍

😀👍👍Thanks for the Work. Nice Start hope for more.

Logic left the group.