the grammar is good but most of the writing, scenes and dialogue are very shallow. the relationship progression the MC had with her girlfriend was rushed, forced. it definately wasn't natural. it's a good first attempt at writing imo, and I hope the author see's all the mistakes they made and fixes them for their next fic.
to soften all the criticism, I liked the fluff, even if there was so much of it, it was heartwarming. I liked the worldjumping. wasn't too keen on the whole making the MC goddess level OP so fast (or at all) as it removes any difficulty when you can just erase your problems from existence with a snap of your fingers.
I am so in love with this story. Im going crazy for the next chapter!!!!!!!!! Please write more its the beat one ive read so far!!!! And iv read a lot!!!
well i would be giving your chapters likes but for some reason the site wont let me it removed the ability to do so and changed to look kinda odd i dont like the new back ground looks and **** btw great story
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This is has been real good so far and I hope it'll get even better... The Yuri makes this really good because there isn't many Yuri reincarnation fanfics that I can find if there is I've been too lazy to look
I have greatly enjoyed this work so far but what scares me is how quickly the MC has gained powers that could make her and her paramour untouchable. Thanks for the words!🐱
Renpangshu