I really like the plot! The story has the potential to keep the readers hooked! I really like the way you presented the characters and background world! Good job author!
An amazing novel that we can look upon to. The story is still developing and still has a lot to offer as the story progress. But this is my initial rate to the author to show my support.
You wrote a good story big brother. Very suspenseful, and intriguing. I also want you to add more main characters. And a little bit more happiness. Very nice uwu
I really like how the book is written. The story is also very interesting the first chapter alone cracked me up. The way the story progresses is well done and cliff hangers are also there. Keep up the good work!
The story is very good in grammar compared to the other stories on here and it is layed out pretty well but the characters aren't that deep yet and we don't know much about the world.
Neat. Detailed. Well written. Amazing plot and good character development! The cliffhangers made me want to read more. I'll be waiting for an update and that it'll be soon.
Your story was really neat and well written, I loved every bit of it even though I'm not the one to read this type of stuff! I loved how it was layed out and everything...Woo good job *pop*
The most excellent piece of writing I have ever had the chance to read in my entire terrestrial existence. The plot is fantastic, well-paced and rivetting. The style is most fantastic and the phrasing beautiful. If only I had come across beauty such as this when I had to recommend an online book a month ago. To read this work is to witness perfection itself. Completely jawbreaking.
Interesting plot and fun characters. Everything is described really well, and I really enjoyed reading this novel! Can't wait for more chapters to read
I rarely read but I really did enjoy reading this. It kept me interested and didn’t make me feel bored.i found that it was easier to read simply because I usually stutter reading but I barley stuttered and that was amazing to me.
The detail and overall plot in each chapter is immaculate there also seems to be a climax route and it seems to surprise me everytime keep it up >:)
Tundy likes hentai spread the word
The story is really good and really well thought out events, but I think there were some grammar issues (I may be wrong), but everything else is great. Keep up the good work.
Very well written, I'm captivated by the story right at the first chapter, love how you describe the background environment, but I'd love to see more "natural dialogues" if you will, maybe it's just my opinion but I'd love to see the characters be more "lively", at the first chapter it'd seem like they're just exchanging words and not having a heartful conversation, but that's just my thought, great work overall
Lami274