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LV 2
Airdurian
Good Job Mate!!
I just want to give some advice about your prologue. It' s lack of clear description even though I think you don't want to waste too much in MC past life. Nice descriptions can rise the quality of your writing at the right place. I know it is to give a background to MC, but it makes the reader confused if you suddenly start changing POV in prologue.
Well just some advice from strangerss :V :v :V.
LV 6
GREEN_p34nutZ
mc name is "Putra" ?!?!? this is chinese adaptation fanfic right ?!?!? your naming sense was...
LV 4
Serb
Never understood this death, not an equivalent exchange, he could continue to live and do good, but he saves an ordinary person.
LV 4
Zahage
No hate or criticism I just wanted to state my own opinion. I like it more when the MC is not reincarnated as an existing character in the story, I find better if a new character is inserted into that world because the interactions between him (MC) the main cast is interesting. That is also a problem I constantly face with story's of douluo dalu 2 even though I quite liked it. Well that was everything I wanted to say.
Still good work author 👍
LV 6
InnerVoice
I hope he save the mom. The fact that she died from malnutrition when she’s the wife of a super rich family is just wrong.
I’m sure she gave most of her food to yuhao, but even then he was scrawny at the start.
How the white tiger family have fallen
LV 2
Your_Mama
Some grammar errors here and there and you should stick to one pov cause it is confusing when the pov switch/change out of nowhere
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