the main character does not cause any emotions, the rest of the characters look cardboard and not alive, as on NPCs in games...............................
I don’t like to rant and rave normally but it’s needed here. From the first chapter all we see is the mic chugging beer and chain smoking. 30-40% of your story is filler with the mc’s habits of smoking and drinking adding nothing to the story other than annoying readers with waisted time and content. This is not character development so what’s your purpose? Unlimited money and he stocks up on cigarettes and alcohol the day before the apocalypse instead of food water etc. In two and a half months he could have found isolated farm property, stocked it with supplies, obtained building construction materials and vehicles, and have it functional with solar power and water wells or stream. It may get better but I’ve stopped at 17th chapter.
You can just tell that the author really thinks that smoking and drinking is so cool and makes characters that much more interesting if they have a stick in their mouth
I don't read novel but I have some thoughts. Is the same as your other stories. I mean do you have real r-18 chapters, do you have smut?
And yeah smoking and swearing - is bad? Grow up, kids. No one care about that.
P. S. How we got to the point that people would bash smoking but taking cock in the ass is something to be proud of? What with this insanity...
I like your past novels, but this one I think is not for me. Anyways I will still support u I hope after your done writing this make a new one abt. Onepiece
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So far so good! I like where this is heading! 😘 Don't stop this please almost all hotd fanfics die early lol update updates update updates update updates update updates update updates update updates
Dude.... I don't understand... your other fic was fine MC wise... wtf happened? First, you start the MC being a God stronger than Luci in the very beginning, then you decide it's a good idea for him to be smoking and drinking every few paragraphs? How can he even feel the effects of smoking and drinking when he's a God? Dude, did you even think any of this through?
You no what bro i enjoyed all your aother books. And i thought just like them this will also be nice. But i am really bored to even read this. It has become like if i don't have anything other to read than read this one.
The premise you follow is he's a thrill seeker... but how would he experience thrills if there are no consequences? He's immortal.. He made his lovers immortal... how would you feel thrill without fear? Smoking cause it's bad for you while you're immortal isn't bad for you.... that's just stupid... You could've made it a gift from his parents.. take away his immortality then throw him in a zombie apocalypse.. he's just a xianxia 2nd generation young master mc...
Plz no lesbian members in MC harem as I already dropped the fairy tail fanfic because of it...plz
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