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“Superhero Gets a Grandpa Systems” first grounds us in the realty of high school, cliques, and bullying before thrusting us into an alternate world. Even though you know Kyle has powers, he acts like any other high schooler trying to get through the day. Then we are plunged with Kyle into a system where he struggles to decide if this training will really help him become the hero he wants to be or is it all a mistake? I’d hate to have a first day of training like his, but it is a great read with an intriguing cultivation system.
Freakin awesome story. I want to know if the sisters will also have powers? Is Samira gonna be his love in the book or just like a friend? I couldn't stop laughing about the whole bathroom thing.
One thing I like about the novel is the people seem like people you would meet. Even though it's a superhero world and people wear tights; it's still pretty relatable. I'm still not too sure about how the author is working the gaming system in, but we'll see!
I think it's an interesting idea I just want to see where it's going.
What's with the whole bathroom thing? :):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)
I like the fact that the story combines two typical story elements like the grandpa in the ring and a gaming system. It's also neat it's like superheors. The beginning was a littles low but I like how its going with the training.
Thank you author! I'm loving it! More Gramps More Gramps More Gramps!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I think the story is kind of fun. It's different having a superhero with a cultivation system. Although, gramps is kind of weird. I think the story is kind of fun. It's different having a superhero with a cultivation system. Although, gramps is kind of weird. I think the story is kind of fun. It's different having a superhero with a cultivation system. Although, gramps is kind of weird. I think the story is kind of fun. It's different having a superhero with a cultivation system. Although, gramps is kind of weird. I think the story is kind of fun. It's different having a superhero with a cultivation system. Although, gramps is kind of weird.
It's well written and I really like the concept. There's a lot of potential for interesting interactions, world building, comedy, drama. I look forward to reading more chapters!
Comparing the author's writing style from Mad Genius and this novel, I can pretty much say that you've effectively modified your writing style to one that can be a lot more immersive. You were able to convey more relatable emotions and transitional phrases are very effective.
This novel has a very refreshing vibe to it, brought by its straightforward narration. Gramps is really oozing out the boomer vibe. And Kyle, dear Kyle is the kid that he is. I hope Samira toughens up!
I advised you about putting a tad more descriptions after dialogues, and you effectively incorporated that. I think you could be more creative in your word choices and how you describe things. Also, watch out for run-ons/comma splices, it still a problem of yours.
The world is still a tad too hazy to me, so I would like it if there's like, a more extensive elucidation on it.
Overall, please continue this till the end! I will be supporting you, stray! (Sorry if I was not helpful enough)
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