ur bk, idea i like, snape finds happiness [rarely done so nice] but the personality,,,,I get that teenage snape was never shown much so u can make him OC but damn,,,he wasnt like this,,,this is like some anime shota ***** style MC [not in a bashy way, this is what he reminds me off]
cause in the bks, snape was shown to be a loner, but not like this, and he was not so *****,y,,,hell he was secretive and intelligent and not open [not a single person knew about his home life ]...Snape was extremely secretive and most importantly he was independent,,,And not *****,y like this....
UR snape is extremely OC to the point that he is entirely a new entity, is my point....and cause of this I dropped....story should be snape, not OC
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