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neguin
Good....................
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Will_Caruso
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Phoenix1998
This is becoming so good author.
Cant wait for more to read.This is becoming so good author.
Cant wait for more to read.This is becoming so good author.
Cant wait for more to read.
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Kurumi21
Thanks for the good work ! πππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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Phoenix1998
Looks good.
Grammar is neat.
Plot is progressing well.
The MC is likeable.
The chapters are good.
And the update rate is consistent.
Cant wait to read more from you author.
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Dayside
Well written, close to 0 grammatical errors.
Updates were pretty high for now, though I do expect it to drop a bit after the start.
Story development is as generic as possibly can be so far.
The main character has nothing interesting or unique about him.
World background is just mostly canon HP with a few additions like the generic magic core thing and a few new families and one girl that isn't canon.
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Xandalar
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Uncle_Sheogorath
In my opinion below average. Pretty much cliche fanfiction. If you read one you read them all. Worst of all there's are a.....TALKING SYSTEM! The worst kind! It speaks like--- 'Hello, young one' like the fuk Lol?! Moreover, cliche dumbledore is apparently bad etc. It would be more unique to see the point of view of a pureblood society or something however here mc I feel is another pro muggle proud nonsense type character which is boring. ; Lastly, apparently, he is supposed to be a pureblood but is raised by muggles or something??-why not be a muggle-born then?!I want something different you know... :(
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Grass_Cutter
Very good I like the concept ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
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Shannon1223
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Enjoyteddy
So this has been interesting so far, and the way the system is integrated into the story is quite clever I thought. The chapter length and grammar are both solid. I hope that you continue to write and everyone else should remember to rate and review!
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HorizonCrown
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AAM0825
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Khors
The story has good grammar and itβs entertaining even though thereβs only 3 chapters but Iβm looking forward to reading more as you release it.
Oh yeah if you ever need help editing I donβt mind helping you out because I feel like this story and you have a lot of potential.
Henrique_Paiao