Very nice and interesting fantasy novel. I liked it very much. Very superb story development. Keep it up and make sure to update new chapters regularly.
Great job..
Thumb's up ππ
only five chapters in and I'm already hooked! this is a good novel! keep it up, author! I know this is too early in the story but this is worth reading. ^^ I'll stack chapters and then binge-read.
AMMMMAAAAZIIIING
Oh my...
It just sucks you right in, and the descriptions?
GIRLLLLL.
You know what youβre doing, and if you donβt;
YOU AREE DOING IT RIGHT.
I donβt even know how you managed to find the right words to describe some of the feelings, because I find it astonishing how you were able to explain, almost effortlessly.
Just...Wow.
I have no words.
P.S
If you feel a little anxious to post your next chapter; afraid to do so, since sometimes the chapters donβt always have the same qualityβhave confidence.
Orrrr...You can send it to me through discord ; D
Iβm gonna lay out my picnic blanket, cause Iβll be staying here for a looonggg time.
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Now that I have your attention. This book has been written to perfection.
The words. Everything. I was hooked from the first line.
Wow. Wow wow
Nice plot. Really enjoyed it.
I'm not done with it but I can barely wait to read more.ππππβΊοΈπππππ
Good work author
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This is a great work! I love how you describe your characters emotions and thoughts. The story development is good and the plotline is interesting! I also love the flow of your writing, it's clear and not all over the place. A bit more information about the setting would be good but it's definitely a worthy read!
You made a good sense of using atmospheric dread as a device to propel this story. I like how the family mystery all comes into play here. Beautiful written and the character interactions are engaging and feels genuine.
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Really love the writing style you have here. Natties gunna have a decision to make xD. Love the world and the characters! Keep it up! Can't wait for more
The book has a very confusing start, it's really hard to catch on but the emotions added on the chapter is really good. Maybe add some more info about the world.
The first half of the first chapter left me confused as I found it a little hard to take in all the thoughts she was having without fully understanding what she went through.
The part where she met Alex was described in such a way that even the word lovely wouldn't suffice. I don't know how you did it but I loved the way the words just fall into place so nicely.
Towards the bottom half of the chapter, the prior turmoil the main character was in comes to light as we can see how she is struggling to cope with the loss of someone precious. I know you described him as just leaving but there is a sense of loss for the people left behind after all.
This story not only tackles the story of someone struggling through a depressive state due to the loss of someone previous, it also brings to light that self harm is only a momentary help to release that pain.
I found this story really well written and hope that you would keep up the good work.
I don't know but your story is so good and I can't wait for you to post some chapters again. Because they way you told the characters story is superb. I liked it. Keep on writing author!!~
well written with strong narrative sense,
but the author has made something that is pretty fatal. Which is the usage of the brands,
the brand is something forbidden for being mentioned in the novel. Except when we have the partnership deal with them.
other than that, it looks good so far. looking forward to your next chapters.
love how the synopsis dragged me into reading this!! just a little bit of tweaking required here and there; for instance, the paragraphs shouldnβt be longer than required. and the updating schedule should be maintained. otherwise good job!!
Initially I was worried reading the first chapter - was Eva too extreme in her reaction while her compounded despair could be resolved through reaching out and conversing with her family members vs suicide as and option but as I move on to chapter 2 and beyond, Iβm glad to read that she got out of that. I enjoy reading EVaβs character setup - negotiate what she wants. Great start, all the best in writing the subsequent chapters
From your synopsis, I could tell this would be an awesome story, and wow your choice of words! Did I say wow?
Anyways I could feel the tense atmosphere surrounding Evangeline, from her family, past, present and probably future.
Chapter 5 gave me the chills, what made that thud? What is she going to meet. I love the thrilling aspect of your story.
A brief suggestion, please it's a suggestion not a command. I appreciate the simplicity of your cover but I think with a cover which would portray your story in another perspective..., it would attract others to your story, you know what the unpopular opinion which dominates, "People do judge a book by its cover!"
Keep up the good work!!!
Supporting you all the way
Oooohhh!!! The story is great so far! The detailes... How descriptive your words... I like how you can imagine the scenes in the story. Good job author! ππ
The story is interesting. I like your style of writing and the length of every chapter is just right. You portray the character's emotions wonderfully. Good job and keep writing β¨
The written synopsis is good! Well written! Worth giving a shot who wants some fantasy mixed with romance book! Got to add it on my recommendations list!π
This story is a very creative one, with interesting characters and plot development. The author clearly has talent, and I hope they get to where they want to be with this story.
The writing of the story is amazing, Your stability of updates is need to improved. Many line and paragraph are longer than i expected. The development of the story is good. Character design is good, and the world background is good.
The story is captivating, with descriptions that keeps you glued to the book. I recommend it and I look forward to more chapters. Although I would advise the author to give more clue to the main character's goals and aspirations.
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I love how you have written the sypnosis - you made it sound really interesting which pulls the readers into your story. Hope you continue writing and keep up with the good work!!!
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