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meixiaolian
The story has a bit of thriller and horror. I like the way you write it but you can more depth and more imagery but the story is nice so yea, keep writing :)
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qweenamanda
Wowza. From the first line, I was hooked. The paragraphs are arranged perfectly(not all, the construction needs a little bit of work) There should be a little bit more spacing but not too much and adjust the punctuations. Overall a good book❤
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mssuigeneris
The story's premise is actually good. And I think the author has a good grasp of grammar as well. However, I had trouble in keeping myself interested in the characters' conversations - perhaps because there is an over-repetition on many generic words that they seem to follow a patter already. I mean this like:
___ replied with a ___ tone
___ said
___ responded
This happens everytime. I believe this can be modified into a more engaging conversation like:
'Karen raised her brows at Shio who eyed her curiously' or something. (This is but a mere suggestion only)
Still, the story remains promising. Especially when they started to talk about phobias and the peculiar thing that happened to Sam. Keep going!
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varean
Your synopsis is beautiful, it got me hooked as I read it. I've only read a couple of chapters and it's interesting. I like how realistic the story made me feel. Though there are a few points I'd like to point out, first would be the dialogues. I think there's just too much, it'll be better to add the character's thoughts because it can help us connect with the main character more. Also, the facial expressions for your dialogues need to change up a bit. I'm not a professional writer but those are just a few points that I and some people think that you should work on. Nevertheless, you've created a wonderful plot. I know you'll keep improving as you write so keep up the good work. Keep updating! Your story is promising.
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RamataMaguiraga
The book's storyline is developing well in my opinion, but I just felt I as a reader didn't get to see much of the characters thoughts. There's a lot of dialog, I can vouch for that, but I don't feel or understand how the characters feel or think in the different situations.
Definitely feel like you can develop the characters stronger! But it's only the begining! I hope to see more of your work! ❤️
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Dawn_in_dark
Ohh that's great novel. Actually I'm in contemporary romance and I found it very interesting. Hope for regular updates. I liked it's story development and character design too.
Keep it up.
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Rankuza
The author has done an excellent job of putting a realistic persona to the characters of the novel. The plot was layed down very smoothly.
I highly recommend that you read this book.
Author, you have done a great job keep up the good work.😁
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Elise_Aigasaki
I love how realistic it is that it made me feel as if I'm present in the setting as I read through the lines. The first chapter didn't get me hooked to it, but as I read the following chapters, it piqued my interest and it made me love it. I hope you keep up the good work!
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MrE
great character development
characters feel alive
descriptions are great
writing quality is beyond good
updates regular
keeps you on the edge
love it keep it up
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Volteair
This story does a good job of suddenly throwing Shio into this world of chaos, along with the reader as well. There's that gnawing curiosity of what happens next and how everything in this mysterious world functions, and the creatures that inhabit it.
There were typos that I noticed often going through, not to mention a repetition of the phrase "Character said with a (BLANK) tone." It definitely needed some switching up, which I am glad to see got changed up in the later chapters, but still was present.
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Ayano_Ann
So one of my favorite things about this book is the mystery! Perfectly customized and with a great note of a thriller👌🏼. I can't wait for the future events and how the story will continue!
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SamsaraWithWords
A few chapters in, it starts to kick off. The setting is very interesting, like watching the approach of beautiful thunder clouds in the distance and not knowing whether to run towards or away from them. Nice job author!
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The_Procrastinator
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Chuck45Single
I like how the reader gets thrown into the story without any unnecessary explanations! Though I have to admit that the built up is a bit slow for my taste.
The plot is super interesting and I'm looking forward to seeing how the book will develop!
To the author: Keep working on your craft! Looking forward to future updates.
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heyimliane
I don’t want to look biased just because I support fellow Filipinos’ works but here is an honest review; first chapter is not that exciting, just full of introductions but if you continue reading you will end up binge-reading it and until you look for more chapters! I retracted I star from the world background simply because it needs more imagery, landscapes and more description to surroundings so readers can imagine the story like they are one of the characters in the novel. Needs few more editing mostly in grammatical errors and punctuations but it is just minor errors so I will keep that as 5 stars. Overall it’s a highly recommended book, fun to read, makes you busy and it’s actually worth binge-reading. Have a nice day.
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Ace_TM
The story is building up and it's good! It's getting interesting and it makes me curious. Very creative, good plot twists, and a unique story for me. The story has potential! Please check your grammars, I know it's hard but you are trying your best and I salute you for it 0_0>. You are a hardworking and passionate author, keep it up!
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bibiyenini
Maybe the fear Shio has is the memories within herself???
Well, if you read the synopsis of this book you will get ahead of yourself in being confused!!! Fear is on the human's line, and we can not get it out of our system!!
This book is a realistic one!! Good job🤘❤
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plainolme
Story starts off kind of slow but builds up to something intriguing. My only suggestion would be to check your spelling and grammar. Sometimes it gets a little hard to understand.
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chayasreedeka
Hey...i just read a few chapters n it's fine..i would recommend it to others...author did her part of work ok...just some errors here n there but which book doesn't have it lol. Update regularly...:)
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Ysabel_xox
Ooooohhh!!!! This story is reaalllyy interesting!!! The plot is there, i like how you portray the characters emotions, how they react in a situation. The story have potential! Keep up the good work author! 👍👍
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