Reviews of Mages of the North: The Adventure Begins by Dalton_Reutlinger - Webnovel

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Franxie03
I used to follow this story on wattpad but several months ago I stopped using the app because they kept pulling stories for no reason. I am SO glad I decided to check for it here! I have absolutely loved chatching up on it! The characters Floris and Alvis seem to be more like brothers than friends. But, I guess in a small village where they are by far the youngest people there, they would be. The addition of Kathrina seems to really balance out their group quite nicely. I'm wondering if there will be a love triangle in the future? The way the characters are quickly growing into their own is definitely what keeps me coming back for more. I am very excited to see their magical abilities start to develop. I really enjoy how vivid the author is with details in regards to their environment, such as confusion of their new world and all the alchemical elements. I truly feel like the story is playing out in front of me, or as if I were part of the story itself. This story makes me laugh out loud all the time with their antics and shenanigans! Please keep the chapters coming as I can't wait for more!
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pravikk
Hi Author..I liked the way story has developed into the character and a small suggestion from my side, book cover looks nice but no clarity. SO think about it once if it changes then it will give more life into that... By the way, all the best with your writing author.
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SilentMild
Dude, you're writing something special! Please finish it, but the cover needs some improvement, mate :D Hoping you could also drop an initial review for my new novel. Its title is Isekai Institute. Thank you!
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Shionokami
Well colour me impresed, this is a diamond in the rough, usualy im not into this type of fantasy but i liked what read, the descreption of the enviorement is well done and the things like alchemy are really well explained! So i will be coming back for some more
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The adventure story is actually fun and great. There is an immersion in it. I hope that the MC will gain some special talents or traits soon=) I dont really feel the naruto part but I feel the Tolkien part when they are forced to leave their home. And I feel the grandeur of the world building. Although author is new but he puts his heart into the story. Some helpful suggestions to make the format better: - Shorter paragrahs - Remove the Chapter in the title
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Drakonous
Edit: Sorry, I deleted my first review cause F**KING AUTOCORRECT RUINED THE VERY FIRST SENTENCE! (Breaths deeply) An amazing story that, while being fantastical, is realistic and gripping. The main character is very shrewd and seems to be an incredible alchemist despite his young age. However, unlike most stories, it's quite believable as the author takes his time explaining and building how alchemy works in his world and how competent the MC - Floris - is (I'm ashamed to admit it, but even I just grazed through my story saying, "Yep, the MC knows alchemy, here's a potion he made in one paragraph!" instead of spending time explaining it). Unfortunately, this does have the effect of making the story occasionally feel dry and the long paragraphs don't really help either. Or maybe it's cause I'm reading this while suffering excruciating pain from my legs which I've had in a brace for a while now hence the add (attention deficit disorder, not the math, silly) The description is also very vivid, I can imagine the village, isolated by a swampy forest full of poisonous creatures. The beginning also made me laugh; the MC's grandma was strikingly like my own (though, in my case, she'd spank me with a stick if I ever coated the house in white powder - wait, that came out wrong) and I really believed that the MC was planning on making ninja smoke from Naruto until he revealed that it was a failed antidote experimentation. Grammar is impeccable, it's really good but I've noticed that a few paragraphs were separated mid-sentence. I'm assuming this may be a formatting issue when copying and pasting from Google docs or Microsoft word, but I'm confident that the author can fix them with a simple proofread, hence no docking of points in regards to grammar. (Also author, if you're reading this, try using the chrome extension of Grammarly; it's a really good way to fix any of the potential errors you might have straight on your Inkstone's chapter edit) Overall, it's a fascinating read that I'll keep in my library and would definitely recommend to any fantasy reader
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uniqueanime2
This book is extraordinary in so many ways that I am having a hard time even writing this review because I don’t think I can find the words to really do it justice. -The synopsis could be better so take your time and think it out. -I love the fact Naruto was one of your inspirations for this story! _recommend😭😭😭_
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