Very well written, intriguing, and clear. This is what I felt when I was reading this story. The only thing which I would like to point out is.
The character description as in features can be written even better and also world set up.
Omg! So here's my review!
The Prologue was "shockingly" amazing! I love how poetic and beautifully it was written.
A round of applause for the writer's writing skills!! ;33
The story is intriguing, but I think author-san you need to improvise on the blurb a bit, it feels crowded and heavy and you should make it lighter!
The story looks intriguing. Wonder what Aerial is gonna do once the power is in her hands!
Sooo I really love the writing style of this author. It's beautiful. Keep up the good work author! ;) ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️ (here's some love for you and your hardwork)
I like the angst of the mc, plus there's the magical power you'd rarely see in stories such as this, it has given me inspiration too. And I'd always look forward to seeing what challenges the mc would cross in order to grow. Keep up the good job ^^
First, claps for the author for trying her best to have different vocabularies even though sometimes it isn't fit the grammar quite right.
Second, the plot was kinda intriguing, so hopefully, that continues.
Third, the flow of the storyline is consistent somehow to not be dull.
The only thing I can tip is that the grammar. Not the whole grammar. I'm talking about how you would deliver your character conversation. Don't cluster them in the same paragraph, so it'll be not too confusing. You need to be aware that many readers in her use phone, so that was quite a mistake.
All in all, a good start and keep writing. Hope we have a great day!
I actually not on FL novel, not because I'm a male, but the novel was still far too on the actual story in my opinion and I hate waiting. So I'll preserve this on my library for a moment and check when it became 20 or 15 chapters.
The premise of this story is an interesting one, and those who are interested in this genre should def look into it!! There are some flaws with the grammar, but it is not so bad that it can't be overlooked. I feel like the story's worlds and characters could be developed more, but as the story has just begun I suppose we'll be seeing that in the future. Overall, good work to the author ^u^
The good thing in this novel is that the author writes magically. Although I am still looking forward to seeking the magic from the characters especially their background story, and the world itself too. I'm gonna put this in my collection, and will look forward to updates!
It is great. One of the best romance stories I've read so far. Hope the author keeps updating it daily. .............................................................................................................................................................
I really like the plot! The story is easy to follow, and other than a few missing letters or commas, your vocabulary is quite large. I think something you could work on is not repeating sentences. For example, you ended a few sentences with "she yowled sniffling".
Fantastic descriptions (both informative, unique, and sometimes humorous), lovable main character, and interesting storyline so far. There is some mystery here that I'm intrigued by. Flashbacks are an interesting way to reveal information, and I think they're used well here. Looking forward to seeing where things go.
Love the story line, it is intressting making you want to read and know more. My fav character is Clair, she has a bubbly personality that makes you smile.
The intro really captivate the reader, getting them hooked on right at the start. Making the reader want to know more about the Aerial and the mysterical voice.
Eagerly waiting for some more! [img=update]