I found the story interesting. I read about 5 chapters from the 35 chapters that have been published. The synopsis was interesting and I would suggest not to give the story away in it.
The world background and the character design are well done. The story is developing well and the stability of updates is well indicated. I liked his discovery of an underground lake and the shinning yellow crystal that enhances his power to see things.
There are, however, some grammar issues which do not interfere with the flow of the story. I would suggest using Grammarly or an online grammar checker to run the text through before publishing the chapter.
I will do a revisit later to see the progress of the novel and give another review.
All the best, Author!
I am still in the early chapters but I'm a fan of the author first book since the very start.
The story has a good flow if you are following the author in the past. So terms of writing quality, stability, story development, character design and world background, it is going to be awesome.
The real story actually starts at Chapter 6 (I feel) and please give the story a chance till until then and the story will be even more exciting. I wish Gray has a chinese name:X
The story was very interesting in the beginning, but then I started to lose interest once that girl appeared in the MC's life. I'm not a fan of romance in general, so that may not bother other readers.
The synopsis was interesting as well, but, you basically just told me the entire story: I almost dropped the story right there. If you change the synopsis just a bit so people would want to know what happens, I think you'll gain more readers.
I didn't see much grammatical errors, however, there were some. The MC was interesting at first,but when the girl came, it's like his whole personality flew out the window along with his logic.
The character design though is designed well, I can see what people are really like so that's good. The world background was detailed for me to imagine it so that's fine.
The story devolpment seems paused, I don't know if you intended to have a filler but it feels that way and I feel like that takes the attention away from the actual story.
However, this story had great potential, and I hope to see it grow into a great novel.
It's really interesting story.👏👏👏 I love cultivational novels. Here hero is naive. He mad about FL but as you suggest the ML is going to be weak to strong, i am sure story is going to get more interesting after each chapter...👍👍 Well done author great job👏👏👏
This book is a treasure just like the title. The author has depicted the scenes so clearly that I could imagine them right away. Good work author. There are absolutely no complaints when it comes to writing or grammar. Everything is perfect. Keep up the good work author
This one's a good one. There's good grammar and punctuation with pacing that's just absolutely perfect so that each chapter feels fulfilling. The characters and their dialogue are entertaining to read and just... the author's really, really good.
Ive read lots if books on this sIte and i love to find differnt Or unique ones. This book blew me out of the water with it uniquness and enjoyability. Had to coM mment just so this can get a rating so more will be able to read.Not many chapters yet but I can see so much for the future of it.
An interesting start to a cultivation novel. I like the eye powers of the MC and am interested in seeing where that leads. So far no cliche face slapping. The MC is naive but doesn't have the mental of capacity of a retard like most translated xuanhuan MCs. Only downside is that it has so few chaps.
Although the descriptions were kind of basic, the story looked a little good until the FL was introduced. The story then became a hero saving the princess. The MC then became a r3tard idiot which constrasts from what was described of him before. He literally becomes a child that constantly asks her to marry him and talks childishly while he gives her everything in his possession. He literally lost everything for all his years of work and has zero emotion other than him wanting to marry her. Then later MC shows girl his secret treasure that he found with his detecting instinct ability that he literally put earlier on how careful he must be to hide it as it would bring the death of him, flew out the window. Only thing that stayed was his ability to make people lose track of him so no1 will find his die hard love. Once the woman was healed enough to fight the weak animals she didnt so it gives more time for mc to shine. Also once she finds his treasure she starts actively stealing it, then he offers her it and she "hesitates" when she was already stealing it with her cultivation? What? Also once MC returns hurt she starts showing that she is interested in him. Ofoej3nfo9rb3 The romance in this novel could be compared to most harem novels. I wouldnt even be surprised if it does become one. I gave up on the story once this annoying torture of love filler lasted for more than 10 chaps, judging from that and the chase scene, it seems there will be a lot of filler in this novel. I only rated this above 3 stars because of me being interested in first few chaps and how his ability will turn out.
Lastly if author is reading this and actually cares about suggestions, only suggestions I have is to try and plan out your book more before writing it as it is hard to change. It sort of feels that each chapter is improvised making the filler a lot. Also try looking at synonyms possibly as I think some of the non landscape descriptions you did couldve been better, especially the ones related to characters. For example emotions. Also, theres only 4 revs and all high, so I wouldnt be surprised if your one of those authors that delete reviews, so if you do I'll be back :)
excellent work 👏 👍 👌
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This is the author. This is my second novel. It is my take on a xuanhuan adventure, weak-to-strong, poor-to-rich epic tale. It will be a serious novel and I want to explore my own story line ideas instead of repeating the same tired cliches in the genre.
The MC will have an OP cheat power but it is all completely enclosed within the world. Romance will be emphasized, as well as harem, but the harem won't be too big. Max will be three or four. I am also aiming for major story arcs that have a beginning/middle/end and can be satisfactory stories in their own right. It won't be an endless treadmill like other webnovels. My aim is to have story arcs around 100 chapters in length and perhaps seven arcs.