Chapter comments on the chapter Chapter 1 of the book I Reincarnated In Twilight

Honestly i like twilighT novels but The Wishes he wants seem pretty lame First of all He gets is Ability to read minds n visions an to give Vampire the abilitiy to eat an have kids seem trash Theres another minor wish but its pointless honestly should of wished for something way better that make him op in that world instead he just a normal human pretty much an Scared he will be exposed so what? If you have true power what can they Do to you abSolute nothing Anyways im droppin

Its as if the mc doesnt breathe

Cut your sentences bro. Its making me breathless anf hard to understand. Put a peroid!!

The start is good. You just need to space properly and also you need to right some more substance. Your writing is really to the point. You need to ad some more lines in between to give the story more substance.

This is unrelated to this book but can you write a Reincarnated into Transformers fanfic?

very interesting start. just a little annoyed he missed out on all those years to practice and master his techno. Still as long as he's actually op ill be happy, too many fake op mcs

You get three wishes but lets make it ten, and the way u wrote about edward and bella seems like its gonna be a bash im good.

I would ask to be like a real vampire when I am turned not the sparkly ice block like the twilight vampires of course with no weakness

Thanks for the chapter ! 😁👍

I think you should reread your chapters before publishing them. A lot of obvious grammatical errors. Run on sentences, missing commas, forgetting to capitalize at the beginning of the sentence, and etc. I’ve tried the whole author thing myself. Wasn’t as prepared as I should have been so I sort of dropped it real quick but the one thing I tried to do was to keep the grammar as clean as I could so the readers wouldn’t struggle as much. I’m an avid reader so i notice errors quickly. Sometimes I can ignore it if its not too bad but other times I can’t. You were getting close to that point for me. I am not trying to put you down or anything I just want this story to work out cuz i have seen too many good fanfics dropped way too early. Just do your best and don’t stress. I’m rooting for you.

Tbh your idea is good......just want to k ow how it want with emmett:3 ..... mc being not spakle vampy is also fine with me!

So mc not a vampire and almost got killed sorry but i’ll pass, and lets not forget he’s bella brother thats just wrong.

Great start

Dark fey ch20?

Thanks for the chapter!

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Man, use more Commas please. The chapter was alright, but it's a little unsettling when the MC do an Eminem at every paragraph.

I don't get the last wish aro and Edward abilities don't compare to professor x so the last wish is pointless

Wow, only read the first paragraph but your written English is really good for someone who isn't adept in it!!! Keep it up!