Chapter comments on the chapter Chapter 14 of the book I Reincarnated In Twilight

Chapter is good except the grammar but the story still is addicting. What I really miss is Collens POV in a lot of previous chapters with big or funny situations . Still. I’m a fan .

It's incredible, there are many twilight fanfics but they reach my tastes and those who do leave them, but yours is incredible and if you add lemons I will like it even more!

Sorry If the fight scene sucked, I don't have experience in writing one so sorry.

I see you want to do an R-18 scene ... I recommend that you take as a reference one of the best novels that I have read about character creation and personality development. For the MC's kind of purpose / objective, I was sure he would hate the novel 😅 The name of the novel is "Stealing Spree". It also has several scenes from R-18 that can help you, the most remarkable thing in my opinion is the construction of the world and the rhythm of writing that is perfect, without time skip. It is a surprise to find good original novels on this web platform. I hope and do not drop the novel, as it has a lot of potential, just like you as a writer, not many people bother to ask for opinions and advice. 👌

Thank you for continuing this fanfic and good luck with Your other story

gotta collect them all... here mc comes your ability are his now

Nice

God you must really hate Jacob sure some of his moves were kinda sketch but Edward is literally trying to commit suicide after someone told him bellas dead that's very sketchy an shows mental instability it's like the doppler dommer theory from how I met your mother an action can be perceived as romantic or psychotic gesture based off of someone interest so edward is seen as broken hearted doppler while Jacob in the books and movies bella led him on a little if she was a bit more concerned like she is in this he probably would of dropped it but here he is a complete dommer like that exchange about having pepper spray in the books and movies she took it to make her dad happy if she thought she would need to pepper spray Jacob when their alone to stop him she wouldn't be friends

finally he punched that moron. also where are we in the films is it the second. hmm guess its time to copy more abilities

I really hop he is absorbing powers cause you never mention it.

Thanks for the chapter ! 😁👍

really enjoying this fanfiction please keep it up. fight scene was interesting in its own way

Thanks for the chapter 👍🐱

That child save at the end was a fast thinking one. Good work 😊

Am going to be honest edweird was funny on the first chapter but after words it get tire.

thanks for the chapter

thanks for the chapter ☺️

Cuando nuevo cap?? Puedes subir más seguido que está muy buena la historia

Really great chapter! Keep going! Give us more chapters please.