So far i dont see eny problems yes the fight was simple but the guy is too op for her so i sai the it is ok 👌 so dont worry just keep writing how you been doing it and you’re been doing good work so far
thanks for the chapter the fighting scene was ok for me at least and because in the twilight world the fighting isnt the main thing and your story is adicting si please continue
Hurray the scythe was used. Fight scene was decent for the time being he should makes seals on himself to get longer fight scenes and unsealed himself for shorter ones
it's really cringy how the mc is always protecting edweird since he is the bad guy and not jacob.
that jacob tried to kiss bella forcefully is too forced
Please continue. I am really liking this fan fic and would be sad to see it end seen as it is the only good one that is still going. The lollipop thing made me chuckle.
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