The synopsis is interesting and made me spend some Power Stones, but this story is totally confusing. In a conversation with more than 3 participants it's impossible to understand who's talking. The grammar is so-so(worse than mine) But the worst part is indescribable!
Bluarg... "ah, No" "Run" "No DADDY"
Ok, with some fantasy you know what's happening but that's the worst writing style! 😣
Not a bad start. I like it right now. The main girl is pretty cool right now. But it's a sad story :( but good. I want to read more if author will still make it
Julkur