Really bad grammar because the story is just MTL and a bit autocorrectur. Many plotholes and breaks in the timeline make the story awful. MTL without editor with errors like monica as the place name insteadt of monaco.
when is the next chapter, please upload more chapters and by the way can he use use magic or does he just use brute force and speed and telekiniesis (dominator's hand).
El concepto de la historia es bueno pero tiene algunas cosas para arreglar, si planea continuar
1.los deseos iniciales se desperdicia es sin sentido
2. La historia va muy rapido, algunas cosas pueden saltarse porque no son de interés pero teniendo en cuenta que ya entra en la trama deberia ser más extenso y detallado
3.mas organización en el texto
Como no es maduro o R18 supongo que no importa los momento íntimos pero bueno
Si el autor adjuntan estos consejos podría mejorar más la novela, saludos, espero mas caps👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
please continue
upload more chapters
please continue
upload more chapters
please continue
upload more chapters
please continue
upload more chapters
please continue
upload more chapters
Nothing personal but you're spelling is ass like I mean straight garbage I can't even read it but the consept is good so keep going and improve you're writing
Usually I don't write reviews because this is free so I can't be bothered to complain, but I feel that if this is cleaned up it could be good.
Currently it reads like an essay someone rushed to finish at the last minute, on their phone, without proofreading to catch their mistakes.
I don't think english is this author's first language, and if it is....dude 😑
Maybe I'm being too harsh, but it's almost impossible to understand the story, beyond the timeskips, inconsistent stats and awful grammar. Is this mtled?
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