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Professor_Light
NOTE: There are more chapters in Fanfiction.net its the same author
NOTE: There are more chapters in Fanfiction.net its the same author
NOTE: There are more chapters in Fanfiction.net its the same author
NOTE: There are more chapters in Fanfiction.net its the same author
NOTE: There are more chapters in Fanfiction.net its the same author
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DrearyEyedSlumber
I really loved the story. For those of you who like it when the mc focuses more on improving his bloodline and anything involving that, then you'll love this in my opinion. Sadly the author dropped it if I remember correctly at like chapter 80 because they lost motivation.
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DaoisttG3KuY
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Lokey_loki
I get that it's not fast paced but this is just to slow and character is like a workaholics mc only explanation for this "bird cage" & now where is Danzo don't tell me, Danzo can't even acknowledge Mc, in the root does he even exist? Talent is good enough to pick Danzo interest, overall it's solid .
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Re_Ahjin
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DaoistZextQE
f u c k you and your annoying jumpsuits.
f u c k you and your annoying jumpsuits.
f u c k you and your annoying jumpsuits.
f u c k you and your annoying jumpsuits.
f u c k you and your annoying jumpsuits.
f u c k you and your annoying jumpsuits.
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Dmurmur
Great book and really funny made me laugh out loud
I don’t know why people are hating on it so much it better than most of the stuff on this site
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ThiccnessSickness
It's definitely got a rough start and his character dialogue does remain a little lacking even into the future, but there's just something about this that's fun to read regardless when you compare it to all the other Naruto SI fics.
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EnderPL
Quality is good but still has misspelling and grammar mistakes.
Update is nothing special but still is.
World background is the same.
Story is fuuuukknnnngg boring as hell! 12 chapters of nothing! Training and training and still he’s weak! No action except one 5 sentences mission. Author thinks that adding BS about mc green jumpsuit is fun and better to concentrate on then to actually progress the story.
I don’t know what to say about Mc. Is he an idiot? Probably. Does he think in superhero way? Not really. Does he make any impact in the story? Hell no! He’s useless in the story!
Overall would not recommend, you will just lose time.
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Sudeep_Kiki
EXPERIENCE POINTS! I WISH WE GOT MORE POWER STONES. I HAVE NEVER USED A ENERGY-WHATEVER IT’S CALLED
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vicky111mudi
nice keep up the good work... write in your pace....
nice keep up the good work... write in your pace....nice keep up the good work... write in your pace....
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eccentricbeing18
i don't know if everyone agrees with this but psychopathic tendencies are starting to get boring.
And it's really hard to believe that he can upgrade his way of thinking if everything written is rudimentary. His lack of creativity with cell compatibility and lack of curiousity with natural energy mutations is also a factor.
Anyway, the more the story progress, the more it begins to sound like a thesis. Almost no plot just data and failing dark humor.
Naruto is entertaining because of the sense of adventure and mystery. This novel lacks them though so I think chapter 27 is my stop.
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Medalha
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alucardtfs
so far so good.................................................................................................................................
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Eamm
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LLP_G10
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KissMyGloriousAxe
While I can't say this novel would be in my top ten- It's of decent quality when compared with many other works on this site. I rarely extend the effort to write reviews; but I'll try to give a list of pros/cons below so you can decide of it's for you.
Pro's-
Grammer/English Flows Well
Not a Harem
Power Creep is logically planned out and explained.
No Character Bashing
Explores the darker side of shinobi.
Cons-
A distinct lack of interactions with the Hyuga clan. I feel that they would try to be more active in his life; so far they're more a passive annoyance.
The interactions with his mom are a bit unexpected and forced... She had completely ignored him in the beginning; then almost out of the blue changes her mind.
I felt more effort could be made on his part to make allies. The MC has neglected potentially useful connections due to what could be.
For example the utter disregard for Obito while teaching Rin struck me as odd... Considering how her death was the Catalyst for his debut as Tobi. It baffles me that he doesn't consider the possibility- That training Rin would completely butterfly things ensuring her survival...
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fellow_daoist_
I am sure I have read this novel in fanfiction.net ...........................!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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lordmattyd
the story is amazing. I love the science mixed with the chakra. please don't drop it. I love the MC's personality. it makes me laugh. but yeah amazing story keep up the good work
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allty
I like this type of thorough story telling with pov changes and my favorite naruto character is Guy so this novel is pretty amazing to me. If I have to complain about something is that everything the mc does works or have little to no consequences in case of failure, that and the fact that he doesn't use the 8 gates.
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OrdealOfMc
ah, I love this story. It's also on my list in ffn.net site/app.
I love the writing style, the story progression and the slow(relatively) strenght progression. I love the geek talk with all the medical terms and random bits of information scattered. I love the dynamics between MC and other characters. And I especially love the weekly scheduled updates.
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welsh123
Honestly it doesn't start out well.
It's clear you are a new writer as the story gets better as it progresses.
The updates have been stable and consistent since March/April.
Writing quality starts out average for fics but get's better as the story progresses.
The same can be said for character design, Isami. Aomi, and Orochimaru are well done compared to characters in the beginning of the fic.
Chapter 61 is really well done and the fight scene embody's ninja-hood.
Two people battling a superior opponent through trickery and planning tickles my fancy.
I like your second fic, you should post it.
Best of luck.
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ValZodIsMyName
I like it. It Has some Repetitive moments but other than that, all good. The interludes are enjoyable For most of the time but thats more or less it.
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