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oyslyness
Hey guysssssssss it's me again.
I hope you've all been goooooood and I hope you are all staying safe out there!!!!!
I thought of something a couple of days ago and I want all your thoughts on this.
I'm thinking of making 'Cloven (Broken) 2'!!!!!!
What y'all think????
The story of Ashley and Christian continues.
More set backs
More fights
More lies
More breaking moments
New enemies and new loses
Can the love they have for each other withstand and surpass all?
Is their love strong enough? Is it the real cause of their downfall or was it just an highschool fling all along?
Stay tuned and find out more in Cloven(Broken)2
So comment away!!!! And let me know if their story should have a part two.
Your comments will determine their future!!!!
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veronica_nunoo
Herr author u are the best. But when I was reading I realized that I have really read this story somewhere actually on this same app just that there were some twists in it but it was the same and it's titled My Mission. But I really loved it . Thanks for this story . Hope you see slot of your books
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Aysel_Inara
- Punctuation
- Sentence structure
- Separation of speech
- Flow
Needs a recheck, it's so hard to read the story for me that I'd to leave on chapter 1 because of these points. And the excessive repetition of HAPPY and ACCIDENT.
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DARK_NIGHT
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popsbooksup
I love this book!!!! Normally I don't read this kind of books but I'm very happy I stumbled upon this one. The plot is amazing even though a little bit fast, editing is needed and although it has a tragic ending, it's still good.
This is definitely a five star book
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Mel_Aniv
This is my second review! I gotta say I'm impressed! With talent and skills of the author, this will fare well in the future! Kudos and may your novel prosper in the future!.....from review swap thread.
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Primate
This is a well written romance fantasy novel. The grammar is of high quality, the storyline is of great interest, the characters are well thought out and the world building is on point. Great work, author.
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Lua_Kai
A very enjoyable read.
I find the characters to be super relatable and well written. There are some minor mistakes here and there but the story makes up for it.
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Primate
Writing Quality:
Goop quality. No noticeable error that could affect the flow of the story. 5/5
Updating Stability: Can't complain much about this since. Knowing the intense stress that comes with writing, I commend the author. 5/5
Story Development: The story is about the Ahley, who woke became heaetbroken after catching her boyfriend with someone else. Right from the prologue, the game progresses in a great way. No deviation from the plot. 5/5
Character Design: The characters are well planned out and designed. Especially that of Ashley. Well made. 5/5
World Background: The world is well built. It's based on romance fantasy.
Overall: A well written novel. 5/5
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Crazy_Cronie_1
This is a great read. I just wanted to read something for passing my time but stumbled upon this hidden gem. The personality of the characters, the drama, the plot everything is awesome!
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SacredDream
I like writing genuine reviews with bits of criticism, so here I am. The only issue is the language, it's not a big issue but some things could be change, best is to avoid he said, she said, he asked and use an action to make that matter when two people talk. Besides that, I enjoyed it very much, the story felt fluid, it was enjoyable to read, the word usage was that of an everyday use so not something beyond comprehension. Tenses in some places were out of place but after getting a little further made more sense, the author is a little quirky and energetic. Correct some commas because there is nothing bad with the story and characters! Even though I am not into romances, this was quite a nice breeze of air.
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JustLetMeSleep
This novel, usually I don't like the drama and this has some stereotypes but it is a bit close to real life, and its hilarious that I actually have a sister named Ashley and I'm her older brother, all in all this novel is going in my library, good job author gonna expect greater things in your next written work.
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Aeipathy_02
This story is a great read. This give me so much feels. I love Ashley's personality and her best friend too. It also has a nice and refreshing romance.
I would definitely look for more chapters and let it stay with my collections.
Great work author!
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tessalovesbooks
Just
want
to
say
thank
you
author
for
this
book.
Even though I didn't like how it ended, I'm still satisfied that I read a book like this.[img=recommend]
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crazyyy_froggg
Finally done with this book!!!!! I can't believe this book has actually ended!!! I loved the ending although I wished some certain things didn't happen (not to be a spoiler) but this is def one of my best reads. Just need some editing and I'm sure this book will go far.
Thanks for this awesome book author!!!
can't wait to read your next upcoming books!
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ILLYAchan
It's been a while since I read a story with this kind of genre since my library is piled up by fantasy novels but I like this anyway! It's heartbreaking to see the problems piling up the mc and It's intriguing to know how the female lead and male lead relationship will go through while having her problems. I'll continue reading!
Anyway, the novel is nice and good overall that keeps the reader interested as the story goes on. Keep it up author!
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Dream_land
WAit why do I feel so relatable as I read I can feel the pain of Ashley the things she is going through FIghting girl!!! I will be cheering up for you!!! Fighting !!!
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Serial_seresposa
It's been a while since I read something original. You kept it simple and brought back the love of reading the typical books that made a girl excited and hopeful
The only words of advice I have. Is if your gonna flashback and forth use your italics it helps give emphasis. Watch your spelling I noticed a lot of errors. Use Grammarly but also make sure to reread. Your transition is good. You've paced the book well. On some parts give a bit more detail other than that awesome
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tessalovesbooks
I don't know how you could sit down to write this kind of story honestly. Left and right, tragic things happen. If the mc has a good thing going on in her life, it is always destroyed by a tragic happening.
In all, I still can't stop reading it.
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docaqui
Let me say this straight..
THIS.
IS.
AWE.
SOME.
ma, first chapter already has the suspense and the drama.. I really love this. the author is awesome when writing this. this is an awesome book
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Ana_musings
Apart from a few grammatical errors, the story is good. If you edit and proofread the text, it would make all the difference. A **** romance is a good accompanient when you are trying to get rid of the day's fatigue. Hence, I would request you to have it re-checked and you are good to go.
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Mel_Aniv
This story has a tragic start but the lead will overcome through it. The narration was clear and you can sense a good grasp of the situation. With a few edits and finishing, this story will leap forward in another realm. Overall, an interesting novel that is worth to try.
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Jo_J
Very interesting story from the beginnig! The plot is captivating, the characters expressive. You're doing well!
Wish you endless inspiration and a lot of great ideas!
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I just don't like wording "fix her" (in synopsis)
We can fix a dishwasher, washing machine, etc., but not a human being.
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NotBeatrix
This book from the very first line, pulls you into Ash’s life. Like most teenagers Ashley is struggling to get through life admist hardship and adversaries. I think a lot of people will find this book touches them directly at the heartstrings, reminding them of a relateble time when we were all just kids trying to figure things out. The writing is fairly well done and very descriptive. You get a clear picture of what the characters look like. There are a few grammatical errors and typos here and there but it doesn’t wholly take away from the reading experience. Keep up the good work author!
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YawningBrain
Very intriguing story, I was hooked into it very quickly as the pace was so well done. From the start you have a heartbreaking family situation that just drives us deeply on how our FL is dealing with her problems and inner thoughts.
The plot really captured my attention with every chapter and I kind of liked that.
Good job author! This goes to my library for sure.[img=recommend]
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TaintedMetal
The Pros
- Simple storyline, easy for readers to immediately understand
- Common themes in books of this kind, including relationships, tragedies, etc.
- Very good updating schedule
The Cons
- The story dives insanely fast. Immediately I felt like I was plunged into the main character's tragic past. Kinda wish there was a build up to that.
- Characters unfortunately in my opinion act exactly the same other books like this. The girl who has her own problems and suffering (Ashley), the hateful ex (Dave) and the bad boy (Christian).
- Scenes and dialogues happen too quickly. There are very few paragraphs that give us more build up or information about what is going on.
- I know this is a book focusing on relationships between characters (kinda like a drama), but I would want to see more of a world, cause it's in this review category. Fictional or real city, it'be nice to see more of the setting.
Despite my criticism regarding the cons, I would recommend this to readers who have read something similar to this book, go for it. Sorry author, but this book isn't my cup of tea.
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crazyyy_froggg
Firstly, I was captivated by the title, then when I started reading the book, I felt consumed.
the book is good, it has a nice plot and I have a feeling it's going to be a great book.
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tessalovesbooks
it has been a while since I've read a book like this.
But reading this book reminded me that they are people like Ashley out there who are facing what's she facing or even worse. The book is so relatable and I love it for that.
You guys should totally read this.
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Gaureeey
HI! Your story captured me right from the bginning, its sad and you know how exactly to put pain on paper. I love how the stroy revolves around Ash,her friends and the grief or guilt that resides within, love this.
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book_struck
Hi.
I love this book! I love the way the author uses relatable in the book.
I also like the way Trish and Christian try and help Ashley.
I can't wait for the next update. Keep it up!!!!
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