We have the same concept but we both differ from the 'Counter Guardian Emiya' point after. also I would recommend that you cut down on large paragraphs slice them up, so you can give the reader's a breather :D
It's so Intriguing that we both have the same 'wish' but different path and outcomes, it's really interesting, I do wish that I updated more like you do but sadly I'm not a very active writer like you...
*Ehem*... anyways keep on improving and good luck with the FF man. ^^/
Writing Quality 3-Stars
Story Development 1-Star
Character Design 1-Star
Updating Stability 5-Stars
World Background 4-Stars
For Real, The Mc disgusts me on a whole NEW Level I never thought was possible.
This is great.
Not too op and have an excellent reason why he is nerfed. Just give him a solid ultimatum on his nerfing cause this might turn to to trash if the god becomes wishy washy with his nerfing.
like nerfing by weakening him or taking his power in the middle of the story just for shits and giggles. He worked for it, he deserve it.
It's kind of strange to read about the flirting child MC and how he takes all the powers of Shirou Emiya. I really see this for the first time, so that someone would make himself an embodiment of Emiya Shiro, knowing his destructive luck. Let's see what happens.
What can I say... Just don't drop it! Or I'm gonna come to yer house and strangle ya..
Perseverance matters the most, some people might called yer work sh*tty, don't mind them. There's nothing time can't improve.
This novel is somewhat creep. The way mc joins the hephesto family is very surreal.
You don't have to think long to know that if gods visit every child who sends a strange letter, they would never have time for anything else.
When it comes to getting girls for the harem, mc actually acts really absurdly, the kind you think if he's not looking for *** dolls instead of wives.
Finally, this novel is not entirely bad, it is still worth reading if you ignore the stupid things but I would hardly give PowerStones.
(Sorry for any erros, english isn't my first language)
PeterGriffith