Reviews of I am An Overlord in the Alternate World by FrostDragon - Webnovel

This is my first time writing a review, I sorry if my review is lacking in any way. - I been enjoying this so far. the story telling is quite good, the dialog of the character fit in perfectly and I also love how the author try to creat the personality for the system too. But there the idea on how thw system work still unclear for me, and how the MC seems to rely on the system a little bit much. And there also some wrong spelling, which make it less enjoyable for the reader. So i would say that the author do a great job on story progressing and character creativity but still need some improvement a bit here and there. anyways, I still looking forward for this story. lastly, thank you for your efforts, author. :DD

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I actually haven't read this novel, but I'm placing it in my waiting list since it currently has few chapters. I gave it 4 stars but I will change my review once I begin reading the novel. A quick side not to the author, please don't make the Mc stupid or systemdependent, also don't make him fall in love and if he does don't make him fall in love with a girl he just met because she's beautiful. please and thank you.

the story is actually pretty good has few mistakes and I just love it, I hope it won't get dropped as it's very interesting and is shown carefully especially the talk between the system and the host is just comedic lol

I didn't want to comment until I reach the last current chapter so here I am. First, I say thank you for the chapters and the great story. This story up to know shows great potential and if you can do it right then it can become one of the best. Of course there are some problems that I will address and comment on so please be patient with me. First and foremost, Grammar. It's clear that sometimes you write words or even a whole sentence wrong which can make it confusing and even a little bit uncomfortable. an example would be the "in stand" word that you use many time and that is wrong because it's "instead" and I noticed how you misspelled it many times in many chapters and I even gave a paragraph comment about it. I suggest for you to use Grammarly app if you're not using it since it helps very much in these kind of situations and can make writing easier. Second, the world itself. We're already 24 chapters into the story and you still didn't explain nothing about how the magic works and how people can use it because it's important since probably all the races can use it and yet we still didn't see any of the people (knights or serfs) use it at all. It's important to keep the world info updated so that readers can understand the workings and relationships between the residents in this world and how it affect the relationship between the races(slavery, discrimination, racisme) and different things. Third, the system itself. I like the interactions between the MC and the system becaue they add some comedy and also it explains how the MC is affecting the system personality because of the memories but what is a little but annoying is how neither of the two try to discover its abilities. The system isn't trying to search for a way for MC to earn magic power and the MC isn't focusing on trying to raise his own power and trying to focus on the army. I know the army is important but MC needs to get stronger with the system so that the moral of soldiers can get higher and they can focus more on protecting the castle. In the end, I just wanna say that I like this story very much and it's been a while since I found a good kingdom building novel so I want it to be the best and not get worse with time

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