Really enjoyed the overall concept, and it is an enjoyable read. The author is writing this in a second language and has its associated challenges but they were not overly distracting. However, a good native English speaker as editor would really help tighten things up. There are a few cultural references that seem a little out of place for the rest of the setting, but not excessively distracting. You can feel the MC growing/changing from the events. This isn't a superhero OP transformation. Our MC is still not anyone would say is "normal" or totally "healthy" by the end, but he has plenty of time to continue to grow and heal as a person. The happily ever after is context and character driven instead of a taken for granted. It is a satisfactory ending that leaves you with lots of spin-off potential for just about every character and setting. I would have loved to know more about the magic of the world, the herd/pack, the cafe, the forest, the backstories of the partners... so many possibilities. Really enjoyed this.
I couldn't make it through the first chapter of this web novel because the writing quality is so bad. Each paragraph is a single run on sentence. I have never seen so many commas in my life. There are nonrestrictive clauses and appositives within each other to the point where it's impossible to know what's actually being described once you get to the end of the 10+ line sentence. The adjectives the writer uses make no sense and very much sound like they were haphazardly picked out of a thesaurus.
Even though it was only chapter 1 and it was so difficult to read I could tell there was a good amount of character building and the plot would likely be interesting... But I just couldn't struggle through the horrible writing to enjoy it.
This story was kinda confusing at some parts, but it was still good! There were also some spelling mistakes, but the book was good so I don’ really mind.
Found this novel few days ago. Beautifully written novel!! You really did a good job even if english wasn't your first language
Thank you for your hard work, author.
Hi,
This is Tiffany, an editor from another platform that focuses on LGBT Fictions.One of my colleagues happened to read your book a week ago, then recommended it to me. As a reader, I have to say that your book was really a page-turner. You are so talented that I admire you very much.
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