Reviews of My fairytale by nishidurani - Webnovel

A fairytale of fairies— and modern day humans ! Overall, the start is following the ever curious and naughty mc, Tammana, who tends to drag her friend Meera into all sorts of troubles. But sometimes, things don’t go the way we want it to be... While the concept may be prevalent in many books, I think with more polish; this could really shine. Here are some of my advice: 1. Writing quality ( 3 stars ): I found quite a lot of repeated grammar errors ranging from fragments, run-on sentences, capitalization, and misspellings. Additionally, I began to find some confusion between the two girls Tammana and Meera, which included switching their names to not clarifying ‘she’ or ‘her’. Another point I would like to make is to refrain from repeating certain words like ‘just’ or being redundant. My solution would probably to use Grammarly or another grammar correcting app while using the dictionary to search for synonyms instead of repeating. 2. Story Development ( 4 stars ): As the concept of fairy tales are used a lot, I rarely find such ideas novel or extremely exciting unless there is a hook factor, which should usually be in the first few chapters. Something I found as probably the ‘curse’ the fairies have forgotten. I think this could have been more elaborated in another way to give a deeper impression on the reader. On a side note, there might be readers who dislike the ‘info dump’ in the first chapter ( aka: the second part of the passage regarding the kingdoms or fairies ) My solution would be to more discreet and try to meld it into the passage with dialogues/ other ways instead of giving it all. But this is only an opinion, and I don’t necessarily think you have to change it bc I pointed this out. 3. World Background ( 4 stars ): I was surprised to see the humans were living in a modern world, which is a welcome change compared to other similar fairy stories. However, paired with the first chapter’s info, I feel it again needs to be ingrained more smoothly into the chapters. Although, despite all this, I hope you never get discouraged and, instead, find joy in learning more about the writing community and writing itself. If you ever do however, know that your fans and I will be cheering for you ! So keep it up, Author !