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4.68

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femme_fatale
Overall it's a catching story with great character personalities. I really like how Lucille's personality is. The plot looks interesting too. I hope you keep it up, Author!
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Ninestar619_5803
This story is very interesting. The start catches you to know what happens next. And then... and then.. It doesn't stop. The writing style is great. It is easy flowing. Great work author.
1yr
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Rin_Nurnia
Hello and an honest review from me. When I read the first chapter, I was a bit confused actually when seeing so many characters but as I keep reading, I can finally differentiate them. Overall, nice storyπŸ‘πŸ»
1yr
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_Rockbison_
Nice story but a little bit short. Still it was interesting to read.... U did a good job author... But also one thing if author has given the chapters a proper name then the readers gonna find it more interesting... So plzzz do care for that author.... But moreover it was really good time to pass for me.....
1yr
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Brian_Hanes_117
The writing is great and I didn't notice any grammar errors. The updates are steady and the story is amazing. The characters are fantastic and the world-building seems to be good enough for this sort of story. I think the writing format could be a bit more consistent (sometimes you flip some single sentences to massive paragraphs) but I won't count that against you since I view that as very minor. One thing I'd like to see more of is visual description. Description of what people look like and of colors. However, I noticed you do a lot better with description than 95% of people on Webnovel. With that being said, I'll be nice and give you five stars because I'm in a good mood. Feel free to check out my story "Avatar: Macai's Journey" if you'd like.
2yr
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HappyKing
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2yr
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Harem_Queen
Will admit I was a little confused at the first beginning, but the more I started to read, the more I got a clear handle on things. I do see room for improvement and can tell you put forth a lot of love into your work! Hope you keep writing and doing what you love the most! You got this and good luck!
2yr
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Genesis_King
The starting image created was very successful. The tags just don't cover a majority of the plot so add more. I hope you continue writing and making such great stories.
2yr
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Professor_slaroM
Great novel!! One that I would recommend others to read, the story starts off with a well-described scene that lets you easily visualise what is going on, and it is perfectly tied together with the action that follows! Awesome novel, remember to add tags so other people can find it!!
2yr
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Sir_WendoS
Although I really enjoyed reading the few free chaps of your story, I found it really too long to read. That's just my preference though... Nonetheless, the story is good, and its told very well too. If you like reading novels in their original format, I guess this book is for you. Go ahead and read it, because it's already finished too! It's like an actual high selling novel!
2yr
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Vienna_Gu
The nice opening, i already read chapter one. This story very interesting, as your another story. I enjoy read this, really [img=recommend][img=recommend] Please give review to Lucia vs Diana too, i also add to my library.
2yr
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DDDylan
A powerful start with great image created. The plot grows so well throughout the chapters while the picture becomes clearer through those words written. Overall a great read
2yr
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mrant12
Very interesting novel. I do not usually read romance but this one shows great promise to be a fun and engaging read! Well done so far, please continue writing and posting!
2yr
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echogillana
Man, I just can't help but love long chapters. AND the characters are fleshed out really well too. That's why this piece of gem needs more readers. Webnovel should do somethinh about this to place it into the limelight!
2yr
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MysteriousMan
Interesting story!
2yr
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Nancy_Jim
Honestly, this book is sooooo good.. Like, author you did great in pulling me into your story.. I'm just sad it's ended already. But listen up readers, pick up this book and you WILL NOT REGRET IT other than having to finish it too soon☺😍😍[img=recommend][img=recommend]
2yr
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Darkanzel
What a fantastic story! You won't regret reading this story guys... I just highly recommend this to all the readers out there.....❀️❀️❀️❀️❀️
2yr
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KayLillyt_1
Lucille Lawes lives an independent life while also being close to her loving family and friends. After a toneless gala with her wealthy parents, she accepts a job offer and meets Nick Atkins. (It was not an instant attraction.) Rude and impassive Nick sees Lucille for the second time and thinks, β€œTrouble”. Thinking she would be that for him when in fact it was the exact opposite And Lucille will does not tolerate trouble. Please ignore the long paragraphs and enjoy this tale of β€œtrouble”, love and forgiveness.
2yr
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JJ_Prakoso
Here are my honest thought based on what I read so far and sorry for the long time to review because of real life problem, World Background: The world building in this one is mostly okay in my opinion and I do like how the author describe the world which is quite detail and most of it fine. However, I think the author should give a clearer direction for the world itself to make it more interesting Characters: Lucile so far its okay and the other cast is also fine in my opinion. However, I do suggest the author to make them more flesh out and added a voice tone to make the conversation have more emotion in my opinion. Overall, its a nice book and I do suggest the author to split up the long paragraph into two or three. Keep up the good work and good luck
2yr
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Sigheti
A brief warning beforehand: I have been quite honest in this review. This comes forth from the believe that you will benefit more from my honesty than from my tendency to sing you praise. So firstly: You present your reader with a popular and promising premise that is well executed. I am not, however, very compelled to keep reading. I believe this because there is an absence of rhythm in your writing. Which causes it to become tedious. Allow me to give you an example: I am a normal sentence. I consist if five words. Look here is another one. This is becoming quite boring. There is no rhythm present. Instead: Instead, try to give your readers sentences with rhythm. Offer them sentences as if you have composed them the same way you would music. Real music. Give them the beating of drums and the sounds of trumpets. Give them rhythm and sound. And then, when you think you have their attention, give them a sentence so long and tedious that you struggle to keep their attention, until you are convinced they have given up until you say, look: it is worth reading. I sincerely hope this absurd example has portrayed my feelings correctly. Secondly, your characters (apart from your main character) tend to feel quite two-dimensional. Which wouldn’t be weird on short-term, but I feel that we spend enough time with them in order for them to develop more immersive character. And I miss that in your work. I know what they look like. I know what their basic characteristics are, but, they don’t feel fleshed out… as your reader, I need more. Give me more texture. Your characters are lively but there is not much dept. I need more information in order for them to feel like actual people. Not necessarily about how they look, but rather how they move. How they feel. Is there a certain charm or abruptness to the way they move? Do their smiles reach their eyes? Do they move their hands while talking? Don’t misunderstand me, this is present in your work. But not enough for your characters to feel real just yet. (Naturally this is very hard to do. I certainly don’t claim to be able to do this perfectly). I do applaud the clear enthusiasm you put into your work and wish you a lot of fun continuing to write your story.
2yr
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Juliet_Omuadona
I love the narrative style of this story. It felt as though I was going on the journey with the characters. This kept me glued to my screen for some time.
2yr
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Professor_slaroM
Love the sophistication in your writing! It flows naturally like fish in the water, and I am really looking forward to seeing your upcoming chapters!
2yr
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Write_D_Words
Writing Quality and World Background: I see that the world background has been explained together with the writing quality that was vivid. The only problem was that the spacing. There were longer descriptions that needed to be separated. Other than that problem I did have a good time reading it until the lock chapters. Stability of Updates and Story development together with the Character Design: I only have read the free chapters so I can not judge completely however, the free chapters went well. The characters, Lucille and her friend even her family has a good response so far. The only thing that this rating dropped was the stability of updates. . it did not meet the daily required updates or the weekly updates. But it was understandable since all of us are busy doing other stuff aside from writing but over all it was a good read!
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2yr
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Cyclxne
I think this is an awesome romance story, even for someone who doesn't read much of the genre like myself. No complaints about writing quality or anything, the only reason I did not give this a 5 star is because of the synopsis/tags. Author, if you make the synopsis more longer/detailed, and add some more tags to this story, I'm sure it'll do great. Keep it up, and best of luck
2yr
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Akira_Monadelle
This was a good read. The synopsis gave little away but it was enough to make things interesting and intriguing. The plot is cliche and quite common, but the author did a good job making their novel unique. The novel had quite a few errors in grammar, punctuation and wording but nothing too too major to adversely affect the novel. I liked the novel but some paragraphs were way too long. It was a major turnoff while reading, long paragraphs just aren't attractive. Overall, the novel has potential despite the setbacks. This is actually the shortest completed novel I've ever read lol. [img=recommend]
2yr
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Leigh_Green
This is a nice read. I wouldn't call it a romance just so yet between Lucille and Nick. Wasn't that more of a hook-up? 😁 Though I'd love how they will develop a deeper relationship to each other. Writing is good. But I hope you will chunk your long paragraphs into smaller ones. It's kinda long to read it The pace is a tad bit slow but okay. The characters are very close close to each other what with the FL being a sweet little princess with a temper of her own. Overall, good work.
2yr
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Precious_Onwe
Okay, the book cover encouraged me to read and it was the best decision when it comes to a romance novel. Lucile is a lovable girl and i hope she gets want she needs not wants she wants. it is a great read. more chapters author.
2yr
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Idyllic_Scribe
First off, very good book. I feel like Lucile's actions throughout the story seem right and understandable. ESPECIALLY for her personality. It's like a constant, however, she does change into more of a dynamic character as time goes on. Also, I feel your descriptions of everything are so detailed, almost like you put a picture into words, it's incredible.
2yr
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Blackpaint
This one is a hidden gem. The writing quality is great and the story itself is very engaging. The author's choice of words feeds my imagination and I could imagine the scenes clearly. Great Job author!~
2yr
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daniz_
This novel has such a nice and well-written beginning. The descriptions are really good and the design is interesting as well. Good work author.
2yr
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