The synopsis of the story sounds cool and interesting but there needs to be an introduction of the world ( in this case the universe) the story takes place in. You throw out a bunch of dates and names that means absolutely nothing to me. The date at the beginning is confusing and the names of races and planets is too much. You should describe the setting of how earth got from current day to the start of your story, broaden the universe for your readers by painting them a map of where all the new planets and species come from. Describe the war that you mention in this chapter. And then describe who the Mc is and how he is currently in this situation. All of this should be about 3-5 chapters and should come before this chapter. The setting is so confusing that it ruins the story for me, especially in a s I-fi where world building is very important.
Stealth95