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author, I found this by chance, but I think you should've posted this on ML not FL. this may have done much better. Yuri and LitRPG are generally for the ML fandom. You can change this by contacting your CE
Is a good novel that I love, the only thing that I hate Is that my native idiom Is espanish and the novel is in english
I think the writing can be a little bit confusing at time (just an opinion) overall loved the story .. and writing would be cool if we dove in the lore of the world a bit more like the gods and the monsters
I fell in love with the first 70~ish % of volume one, was sorta okay with the remaining 30% and I'm kind of struggling with volume two. Now disclaimer: I'm just not really a fan of kingdom/organization building. Much like Arpious this starts as a sort of progression litrp for the first volume or so until it starts leaning harder into kingdom building sort of stuff. I personally just don't find the genre that interesting, it generally spends a significant amount of time developing side characters I'm not really interested in, and it usually means stunting the main characters growth (in both strength and personality, just because they start getting a lot less screen time) because the side characters need to catch up in order to participate. Which is kinda what happens here. Kind of abruptly all 11 of Lucy's friends also become overpowered ancient beings and a couple chapters later they all get a new evolution while Lucy gets a pittance of xp, and then a couple of chapters later everyone gets yet another evolution while Lucy gets almost halfway to her next one. If everyone's special, nobody really is. Putting aside the astronomical odds that everyone in their group just so happens to be descended from gods/mythical-beings/etc. It kind of cheapens Lucy's experiences when everyone just kinda gets it handed to them at much lower cost. I get why it was done, and a lot of novels do this too, but it always feels kind of lame when it happens. Too many characters in the kitchen: there's like 12 girls leading their organization including Lucy, and 2 more that are executives. I honestly struggle to remember much about any of them to differentiate aside from Mia, Sophia, and Charlotte, the former cause she's the love interest and had a much larger role in volume one, and the latter two oddly enough because they're NOT part of the main group. As an aside here, they have a sort of hivemind thing going on, which triggers in fight scenes. Meaning we watch from Lucy's pov as she rapidly cycles through the povs of the other girls, leaving you kinda confused as you're trying to remember who uses what weapon, who has what powers, who's positioned where. Granted, it was cool the first time it happened, and kind of annoying subsequently. Volume two kinda marks the end of 'Rise of Quetzlcoatl' and it starts being 'Rise of Tolf'. Cause the story isn't really about Lucy or Quetzlcoatl anymore. We start seeing povs of other characters a lot more often, Lucy herself kind of becomes a lot less interesting, certain threads from book one kinda just go poof cause of the relocation and time skip, Romance/smut stuff becomes more prevalent, which isn't good or bad, I'm just asexual and don't really have an interest in any of it Tl;Dr I came for the premise, stayed for Lucy's story, mildly disappointed when it became something else. Overall it's still better than most web serials I've read and you'll probably have a great time unless you have more weird hangups than I do.
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I'm currently a little more then half way through the novel. I enojoyed the what I read and felt intrigued on what will happen next. I just came in expecting more romance. It is in the novel but it follows more along lines of the action genre, nothing wrong with that just not what I came for. Highly recomend the novel to anyone who wants the action/romance flavor. Its very cute and heart warming times and makes you want more at times. Thank you author for writing the novel, just not for me.
Is this harem? And if not can u make it harem pls? .........................................................................................
just a suggestion but perhaps do a short hiatus so you can write a bunch of chapters and upload them all at once that way people who have purchased the privilege will be able to read more chapters as you continue to update
what's going on with the privilege chapters? I purchased the base package when that was 120 chapters that was the limit for the locked chapters after that they were privilege chapters base package was supposed to give me two chapters Early Access every time new chapters were uploaded but I haven't been able to read past 122 even though we're at like 126 other novels that I buy privilege pass for let me read new chapters when they update with more this is the only one that hasn't let me do that I'm just curious why it's not
I cant seem to read the Last 2 chapters even though I paid for privilged to be able to read them I really enjoy this and need to read more chapters [img=update][img=update]
What words to describe how much of a masterpiece this is... I want to write a decently long detailed review but I feel lazy so... uhh... I'll just point out random things I guess. First things first... YURI!!! I have a serious addiction to yuri, everything I read is good but when there's no yuri it just feels so... lacklustre? Like, everytime I read some romcom novel where It's F x M, I feel like, sure, IT IS great, but like, I feel like it doesn't make me as happy and excited as yuri could. The writing is, what can I say, It's higher than the word highest. Although there were a few misplelled words, there was nothing wrong with the grammar. The characters are also just fantastic! I mean, white haired female MCs are just the best and nothing could change my mind about it. The personality is, uhh, a bit...confusing? Well, sometimes. I just felt like her personality changes WAY TOO MUCH and TOO FAST. It's probably because of my reading speed and the story's time skips, my excitement is also a variable since the more excited I am the more I would want even more of this novel. Like, if I read every chapter and there was no more chapters to read, I'll probably be in agony saying how "I'M DYING FROM BOREDOM! I NEED MORE CHAPTERS!" But, well, I also know authors are human not some restless robots and so I just try to convince myself that there will, hopefully, another chapter fast. I feel like I have more to say but I think this is enough. All I can really say right now is that this is worth reading and you'll regret it if you don't read this. So why not give it a try?! If you like it after reading, why not support by stones, rewiew or gifts to motivate author to continue doing a great job!
This will be interesting if this rushed romance successfully end up good because most of the rush romance I've known didn't end up good. So please continue updating more chapters I want more action and especially yuri for my imagination.😊😊
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I LOVE this story, the characters, the character development is incredible. The only thing i can say is I would appreciate more chapters if possible.... Plz?
plsssssssssssss update soon author i've been waiting for along time..... .......i beg you to update plssssssss🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
*heavy spoilers btw* *Warning: most of this are my personal opinions* -The novel idea and lore is good. -The writing is good but could need better explanation and smoother actions. I need to process the actions between paragraph sometimes. -The story get real weird after the auction house chapter(22+). There are sudden unrealistic romances, sudden mysterious organization etc. -The solutions sometimes feels too plot-armored like having 600 years old mom. -The MC has severe trust issues and PTSD but not enough paranoia and too clueless about the world. She also turn cold blooded from not wanting to kill pretty fast. super unstable. -The MC somehow has quite a lot of rich young master friends. -The city lacked security even in a technologically advanced yet devastated world. 600 years are really long ya know. That's all I could think of for now. Awaiting further developments. Overall I'm giving it 4 5 3 2 4 respectively for a total of 3.6/5.
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The novel was incredible, I was really liking everything until Tiana appeared and everything lost meaning to me once she admits to being emotionally manipulating the MC sincerely the novel is incredible but I can't stand this character of Tiana
I like this story .. the background is also more extensive, especially I like the Yuri + Action genre, I'm also looking forward to future developments ..
The story was quite good, at least up to the point where romance was introduced. Well, let's go to some strong and weak points of the story shall we? Pros: World Building; the world building aspect is quite unique, and it's seen through the eyes of the protagonist, though of course because of this the development of world building would be quite slow and the world isn't exactly fully explained but it gives off a sense of mystery which I quite like but it may not be for everyone. Oh also the story's take on the system is great. 4.6/5 Writing Quality; the paragraphs are very readable, the uses of words is alright, and there are only few grammatical errors. 4.2/5 Updates; This is self explainable, it updates every other day. 4.4/5 Now onto why this story got such a bad score; the Cons: Story Development; now mind you, I was going to originally give this a 4.6 or even 4.7 but then the romance part happen. The pacing is just right and it isn't rushed and slow in any way, there are few plot holes. The problem here is the romance, it's too rushed and by that I mean way too rushed. Sure it's tagged yuri and it'll come eventually but at least you should do so naturally. The romance seems forced, and as of now it doesn't at all fit. 3/5 Characters; Oh boy, do I have a lot to say about this one. Let's first go over the protagonist, a cold, somewhat calculating, and at first extremely revenge driven person. But then Chapter 43 happens and most of her personality is thrown out of the window, You don't just go from potential enemy to pawn and then straight up to lovers. That's not how relationships work, nor how a human mind work either. She's written to have trust issues and seem manipulating, so why just suddenly drop it all instead of developing everything instead? As for the other side characters we have seen way too little of them for me to properly rate the others but for now. 1.8/5 Overall the story is quite good, though weighted down by the sudden massive break of character and romance. Total score: 3.6/5
Really like this novel, grammar is really good too 👌🏼 👍🏼 .............................................................................................................................
I like the story so far and the characters are likable too especially the MC. I dont have any complaints but I have curiosity. Its just I always wonder who will be Lucy’s future partner/lover. I mean it has a yuri tag on it.
It's good no obvious mistakes needs more chapter for more judgment i like it for now. Also when will she get her noble phantasm? (~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~
I love the story and idea of it and will this story be updated everyday when you have a few chapters already written like your first one? also does the ice primordial brave know about what she is?
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15 chapters in and im absolutely loving it. I love the MC and how she’s changed and adapted to become strong. Very excited to see how conflicts evolve. The only thing Id change about this novel is even more chapters being released. Cant wait to read more
read your other book and thought let's go read this one. I love this one. .. .............................................................
I've read until 600. The world building is good. There are times when it gets boring but not repetitive. The story doesn't stay in one spot for too long(which I think at least is a plus). Their of course, are Arcs they're good. The story stays at a steady paste. Chapter development is not in detail, and you just don't know some/most personalities but characters even when their an important chapter. Their are parts in the story where they change the POV a bit too many times and their are times when I don't even know which character's POV we're on.(Of course the Author puts in who's POVit is, but there's times when it goes on to for too long and I lose track. All in all it it's a decent read. P.S. The only reason I read this was I wasn't able to find anything I liked or found interesting enough.
author, I found this by chance, but I think you should've posted this on ML not FL. this may have done much better. Yuri and LitRPG are generally for the ML fandom. You can change this by contacting your CE
Is a good novel that I love, the only thing that I hate Is that my native idiom Is espanish and the novel is in english
I think the writing can be a little bit confusing at time (just an opinion) overall loved the story .. and writing would be cool if we dove in the lore of the world a bit more like the gods and the monsters
I fell in love with the first 70~ish % of volume one, was sorta okay with the remaining 30% and I'm kind of struggling with volume two. Now disclaimer: I'm just not really a fan of kingdom/organization building. Much like Arpious this starts as a sort of progression litrp for the first volume or so until it starts leaning harder into kingdom building sort of stuff. I personally just don't find the genre that interesting, it generally spends a significant amount of time developing side characters I'm not really interested in, and it usually means stunting the main characters growth (in both strength and personality, just because they start getting a lot less screen time) because the side characters need to catch up in order to participate. Which is kinda what happens here. Kind of abruptly all 11 of Lucy's friends also become overpowered ancient beings and a couple chapters later they all get a new evolution while Lucy gets a pittance of xp, and then a couple of chapters later everyone gets yet another evolution while Lucy gets almost halfway to her next one. If everyone's special, nobody really is. Putting aside the astronomical odds that everyone in their group just so happens to be descended from gods/mythical-beings/etc. It kind of cheapens Lucy's experiences when everyone just kinda gets it handed to them at much lower cost. I get why it was done, and a lot of novels do this too, but it always feels kind of lame when it happens. Too many characters in the kitchen: there's like 12 girls leading their organization including Lucy, and 2 more that are executives. I honestly struggle to remember much about any of them to differentiate aside from Mia, Sophia, and Charlotte, the former cause she's the love interest and had a much larger role in volume one, and the latter two oddly enough because they're NOT part of the main group. As an aside here, they have a sort of hivemind thing going on, which triggers in fight scenes. Meaning we watch from Lucy's pov as she rapidly cycles through the povs of the other girls, leaving you kinda confused as you're trying to remember who uses what weapon, who has what powers, who's positioned where. Granted, it was cool the first time it happened, and kind of annoying subsequently. Volume two kinda marks the end of 'Rise of Quetzlcoatl' and it starts being 'Rise of Tolf'. Cause the story isn't really about Lucy or Quetzlcoatl anymore. We start seeing povs of other characters a lot more often, Lucy herself kind of becomes a lot less interesting, certain threads from book one kinda just go poof cause of the relocation and time skip, Romance/smut stuff becomes more prevalent, which isn't good or bad, I'm just asexual and don't really have an interest in any of it Tl;Dr I came for the premise, stayed for Lucy's story, mildly disappointed when it became something else. Overall it's still better than most web serials I've read and you'll probably have a great time unless you have more weird hangups than I do.
Reveal Spoiler I'm currently a little more then half way through the novel. I enojoyed the what I read and felt intrigued on what will happen next. I just came in expecting more romance. It is in the novel but it follows more along lines of the action genre, nothing wrong with that just not what I came for. Highly recomend the novel to anyone who wants the action/romance flavor. Its very cute and heart warming times and makes you want more at times. Thank you author for writing the novel, just not for me.
Is this harem? And if not can u make it harem pls? .........................................................................................
just a suggestion but perhaps do a short hiatus so you can write a bunch of chapters and upload them all at once that way people who have purchased the privilege will be able to read more chapters as you continue to update
what's going on with the privilege chapters? I purchased the base package when that was 120 chapters that was the limit for the locked chapters after that they were privilege chapters base package was supposed to give me two chapters Early Access every time new chapters were uploaded but I haven't been able to read past 122 even though we're at like 126 other novels that I buy privilege pass for let me read new chapters when they update with more this is the only one that hasn't let me do that I'm just curious why it's not
I cant seem to read the Last 2 chapters even though I paid for privilged to be able to read them I really enjoy this and need to read more chapters [img=update][img=update]
What words to describe how much of a masterpiece this is... I want to write a decently long detailed review but I feel lazy so... uhh... I'll just point out random things I guess. First things first... YURI!!! I have a serious addiction to yuri, everything I read is good but when there's no yuri it just feels so... lacklustre? Like, everytime I read some romcom novel where It's F x M, I feel like, sure, IT IS great, but like, I feel like it doesn't make me as happy and excited as yuri could. The writing is, what can I say, It's higher than the word highest. Although there were a few misplelled words, there was nothing wrong with the grammar. The characters are also just fantastic! I mean, white haired female MCs are just the best and nothing could change my mind about it. The personality is, uhh, a bit...confusing? Well, sometimes. I just felt like her personality changes WAY TOO MUCH and TOO FAST. It's probably because of my reading speed and the story's time skips, my excitement is also a variable since the more excited I am the more I would want even more of this novel. Like, if I read every chapter and there was no more chapters to read, I'll probably be in agony saying how "I'M DYING FROM BOREDOM! I NEED MORE CHAPTERS!" But, well, I also know authors are human not some restless robots and so I just try to convince myself that there will, hopefully, another chapter fast. I feel like I have more to say but I think this is enough. All I can really say right now is that this is worth reading and you'll regret it if you don't read this. So why not give it a try?! If you like it after reading, why not support by stones, rewiew or gifts to motivate author to continue doing a great job!
This will be interesting if this rushed romance successfully end up good because most of the rush romance I've known didn't end up good. So please continue updating more chapters I want more action and especially yuri for my imagination.😊😊
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I LOVE this story, the characters, the character development is incredible. The only thing i can say is I would appreciate more chapters if possible.... Plz?
plsssssssssssss update soon author i've been waiting for along time..... .......i beg you to update plssssssss🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺
*heavy spoilers btw* *Warning: most of this are my personal opinions* -The novel idea and lore is good. -The writing is good but could need better explanation and smoother actions. I need to process the actions between paragraph sometimes. -The story get real weird after the auction house chapter(22+). There are sudden unrealistic romances, sudden mysterious organization etc. -The solutions sometimes feels too plot-armored like having 600 years old mom. -The MC has severe trust issues and PTSD but not enough paranoia and too clueless about the world. She also turn cold blooded from not wanting to kill pretty fast. super unstable. -The MC somehow has quite a lot of rich young master friends. -The city lacked security even in a technologically advanced yet devastated world. 600 years are really long ya know. That's all I could think of for now. Awaiting further developments. Overall I'm giving it 4 5 3 2 4 respectively for a total of 3.6/5.
Reveal Spoiler The novel was incredible, I was really liking everything until Tiana appeared and everything lost meaning to me once she admits to being emotionally manipulating the MC sincerely the novel is incredible but I can't stand this character of Tiana
I like this story .. the background is also more extensive, especially I like the Yuri + Action genre, I'm also looking forward to future developments ..
The story was quite good, at least up to the point where romance was introduced. Well, let's go to some strong and weak points of the story shall we? Pros: World Building; the world building aspect is quite unique, and it's seen through the eyes of the protagonist, though of course because of this the development of world building would be quite slow and the world isn't exactly fully explained but it gives off a sense of mystery which I quite like but it may not be for everyone. Oh also the story's take on the system is great. 4.6/5 Writing Quality; the paragraphs are very readable, the uses of words is alright, and there are only few grammatical errors. 4.2/5 Updates; This is self explainable, it updates every other day. 4.4/5 Now onto why this story got such a bad score; the Cons: Story Development; now mind you, I was going to originally give this a 4.6 or even 4.7 but then the romance part happen. The pacing is just right and it isn't rushed and slow in any way, there are few plot holes. The problem here is the romance, it's too rushed and by that I mean way too rushed. Sure it's tagged yuri and it'll come eventually but at least you should do so naturally. The romance seems forced, and as of now it doesn't at all fit. 3/5 Characters; Oh boy, do I have a lot to say about this one. Let's first go over the protagonist, a cold, somewhat calculating, and at first extremely revenge driven person. But then Chapter 43 happens and most of her personality is thrown out of the window, You don't just go from potential enemy to pawn and then straight up to lovers. That's not how relationships work, nor how a human mind work either. She's written to have trust issues and seem manipulating, so why just suddenly drop it all instead of developing everything instead? As for the other side characters we have seen way too little of them for me to properly rate the others but for now. 1.8/5 Overall the story is quite good, though weighted down by the sudden massive break of character and romance. Total score: 3.6/5
Really like this novel, grammar is really good too 👌🏼 👍🏼 .............................................................................................................................
I like the story so far and the characters are likable too especially the MC. I dont have any complaints but I have curiosity. Its just I always wonder who will be Lucy’s future partner/lover. I mean it has a yuri tag on it.
It's good no obvious mistakes needs more chapter for more judgment i like it for now. Also when will she get her noble phantasm? (~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~(~^. ^)~
I love the story and idea of it and will this story be updated everyday when you have a few chapters already written like your first one? also does the ice primordial brave know about what she is?
More chapters plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz😄
15 chapters in and im absolutely loving it. I love the MC and how she’s changed and adapted to become strong. Very excited to see how conflicts evolve. The only thing Id change about this novel is even more chapters being released. Cant wait to read more
read your other book and thought let's go read this one. I love this one. .. .............................................................
I've read until 600. The world building is good. There are times when it gets boring but not repetitive. The story doesn't stay in one spot for too long(which I think at least is a plus). Their of course, are Arcs they're good. The story stays at a steady paste. Chapter development is not in detail, and you just don't know some/most personalities but characters even when their an important chapter. Their are parts in the story where they change the POV a bit too many times and their are times when I don't even know which character's POV we're on.(Of course the Author puts in who's POVit is, but there's times when it goes on to for too long and I lose track. All in all it it's a decent read. P.S. The only reason I read this was I wasn't able to find anything I liked or found interesting enough.