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Exodus_Reborn
I liked the story plot of the first chapter very much. It has a traditional start like chinese novels or korean novels. Since it's royal romance, I think the plot so far is good. Although it's a bit cliche, it's still bearable and interesting. The vocabulary is good. Only the one thing which concerns me that it would've been better if the beginning sequence started with a scene with the princess crying all alone, then wiping her tears when the servants came, looking all tough from the outside...like she's not scared or heartbroken with the king decision, then the info about empires in between could be better. Obviously, it started getting interesting after a few paras, but the thing is new readers have no patience to understand the whole story. they only the care about the start if they're new to this story. so, the first few paras could've been show and not tell (info) so that those scenes can attract reader's attention at the start only thumbsup. only that, I'm concerned of. The rest is very well portrayed, I'm not qualified enough to tell you what to write and what not to write or what is right and what is wrong. This is just a suggestion from my side. it's up to you, if you wanna change or think it's okay to be that way.
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sanrom905
So far all that I’ve read has been extremely intriguing to the point where i want to continue readIng I only hope that this book is not thousands of chapter as I’m done reading what I call forver books. I seriously want out of wbn. I’ll be leaving soon as I finish the two books im reading.
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lovelizzy008
i really love the plot of the story first time i've come across stories like this, I really want to see how lili would survive. more love to the writer🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰
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