Chapter comments on the chapter Kadyn of the book Magic Shop System

did he died by drowning or by being hit on his head???

nice chapter

Late to the party, but I just wanted to say that the second half of this chapter seemed a lot easier to read than the first. You may have not realized it while writing, but it seemed that early on you were trying a bit to hard to emphasize things with lots and lots of adjectives (like I get it, the main character’s eyes are blue). It made reading those parts have the opposite intended effect and came off as unnatural. I think the second half was easier to read because you that’s when you began naturally writing and didn’t try to force anything. Something to keep in mind as you continue writing.

hi your loyal reader from heaven destroyer though the account is different....will this also have harem like heaven destroyer?

oh its looking promising

👍

@Author..no worries am already intrigued by the first chapter..as long as there are no hiccups along our journey then i can assure you that you just got a loyal reader🏄💯

Nice chapter.

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Thx

Find a shop or soul will die? Lol so Mc is a puppet of some god😂

Thanks for the chapter. Interesting

I say, author-san please don't start demeaning your book from the very first chapter. it's bad for business cause people may automatically think the book will be really bad while it's not. wait till about 5 readers complain about the MC being stuuupid then u can say that the MC will be stupid for the first 100 or 200 chapters y'know something like that.

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thank u author for letting is know up front your MC is a complete idiot... but with growth potential lol

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You think this is gonna be like black tech internet cafe, when it's actually more like one of those cliche 'unassuming fifth son of the baron' type novels.