Good start and fast development of events. Clear and attentive detailing of the world and descriptions of the characters are pleasant to read. I hope to meet an unexpected storyline turn and get a strong impression. Good luck author. thanks for the read.
The title screams angst so I am glad to see the Happy ending tag. πΈ Moving on, it has a nice pacing and the characters are designed we'll. I for sure don't find them boring.
I have decided, I will get my seat and camp out here. Update frequently o.
It's a short but sweet story written with poetic words between two characters reminiscing and rekindling their love for one another. I like it because it makes you feel warm after.
I came here just to give it a look, but I'm totally hooked. π The story is on point - same with the style of writing... Can't wait to see what's coming next [img=update]
Thanks for reading my story guys
I know there are many shortcomings
My mother tongue is Arabic and English is the fourth language in my country so I am not good at it so sorry
In general, I love you
Tbh I didn't think that this would be a poetic type and I was surprised but at the same time completely drawn by the words you've write. It made me feel nostalgic, sad and felt a vivid memory came into my thoughts. Great job Author!
REVIEW
Narration: Decent and immersive
Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed
Character development: Nice and steady
Character design: Outstanding
Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike
Pacing: Not fast nor too slow
Writing quality: Magnificent
Execution of the Genre: Good pitch
Story potential: High
Updating Stability: Steady
MESSAGE
I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) π
Advice
At least make the title into capital letters π
It took me by surprise. It's so poetic and filled with nostalgia. I really liked how the characters were presented, and how it ended.
Kudos for the author, it deserves to be in the right shelf here in WN to be truly appreciated. There's nothing that can't be easily fixed, in terms of grammar (I'm not so good at it myself, so...)
I really look forward for what next the author will bring to us.
This novel reminds me of the song,
"Hey Jude, don't make it bad.
Take a sad song and make it better.
Remember to let her into your heart,
Then you can start to make it better."
Just change her to him. And you get a happy feeling.
BlindBandit