.....................................................................................................................................................................................it was nice
This story needs a bit more description and background. I also encourage the writer to work on grammar and tightening that up as you progress. Feel free to update it as much as needed. If you need any support, I might help occasionally if I can.
But I congratulate you for attempting this story. It seems like it has an interesting start and I know you have potential. Can't wait to see what it matures into over time.
to be honest i loved the storyline
it's just pay attention to your punctuations
then a bit grammatical errors
u can increase your vocabulary and write more kind of new words understanding me ?
still it was good as for first book
i will be waiting for ur updates
u have not update recently
please update regularly
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AMAZING READ !! the story is quite cute and captivating. The characters are unique and adorable. Loved the progression of story.
KEEP UP THE WORK !!
UPLOAD MORE CHAPTERS!!
Although it has only two chapters at the moment I think the author is in a good path.
The introduction was clear and straightforward it gave me an all-around idea of what the book is all about, so good job there.
The grammar can be improved, some punctuation were missing and I noticed that after the apostrophe followed small letters, I think it should be capital letters.
To summarize, this book is going in the right direction. I'm also busy with my first book and I realized that improvement comes as you move forward, you can use apps like Grammarly to improve the grammer, and don't rush, move at your own pace.
Nice start. I'll focus on the story first. It's a cute story indeed and I'm looking forward on how the FL would do in the company. The characters are still developing since it's only the start but the FL is very cute and still optimistic despite several misfortunes.
Regarding the writing quality, the author clearly stated that it's their first book so I'm considering it in rating. I'm not a native english speaker so I'm not fluent as well, but if I could give an advice, please do capitalize the first word even in the dialogues.
For example:
"Are you okay?"
"Yes."
I'm not really irked with minor typos and such but other readers do, so it will be nice if you proofread before publishing. Anyway, I know the writing would improve as you continue writing. Fighting!
Its me who is rating its own books
Please support i hopw you will support me
And Correct my mistakes
Because i am still a new writter
With not that much experience
Aria_004