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Jasonenrick

After 75k words I'd like to have my say, so that any new readers might have a bit of an overview. I wouldn't say it's special or impressive, but interesting enough if are bored at the moment and need something to pass time. I wrote the first 10-20 chapters way before the other chapters and they weren't good in terms of content, nor were they very sophisticated, so I understand if most people are put off when they read the first chapters, but I guess there's nothing I can do about that. I try my best to incorporate people's ideas and suggestions into my story and listen to what the readers want and that's how my story is. A mix of chaos and creativity coming together. Hope you like it :D

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scott_binder

Honestly love that there’s a story before the fall of Valeria. The wold building and characters are great, it just splits the story’s attention away from the MC and trys to tell the story from a random person’s perspective. Otherwise love that the story opens up at the very end (chp.72so far) and really look forward to it continuing!

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_DEKIM_

The novel is good, but Yuri, no thanks. And the protagonist falls in love with a prostitute, nothing against prostitutes, but I personally found it kind of meh. But the novel is good.πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

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Melshan

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Eruvadhor

The author said that he didn't put much effort in researching to write this fic, but I have to say, the quality is very good, the characters feels alive and he's adept to "show not tell"

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GrandElderXi

few chapters in, and everything seems great so far thank you authorπŸ™πŸΌπŸ«‘

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Unhonored

I really enjoy this story. It's one of the best fanfictions I've read so far, and believe me, I have over 911 hours of reading time on this app alone and have finished 913 books. I hope you continue uploading chapters until the story's conclusion.

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Haroon_Patel

Good stuff! Thanks for sharing this with us.

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DaoistkxGQYF

Found this a couple of days ago and have really enjoyed it so far. The concept the author is using of the setting and time period being in old valariya is unique and don’t think I’ve really seen used before. The update schedule and grammar are all pretty good as well, the one thing I would slightly like to see a little more of would be the application of magic itself. Overall this has been a great story and hope author keeps up the good work

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jesus_5209

Eh leΓ­do hasta ahora hasta el capΓ­tulo 32, me ha parecido interesante, no es lo mejor de lo mejor pero es interesante y entretenido si estΓ‘s aburrido, lo que si quisiera saber es en quΓ© aΓ±o estΓ‘ hasta la destrucciΓ³n de valyria y pues recomendable si estΓ‘ aburrido y te gustan los fanfics de game of thrones

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Trafford

So... finally, a kingdom-building ASOIAF fanfic set in the times of the Valyria... there is really, heavy deficit of them as most would just get dropped overtime, we shall see how this will develop though for now, it is solid 10/10

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Daioista

I read up to chapter 5, the story is still not very captivating, I have a question author, did you portray Valyria as the brutal empire they were? Because like... Valyrian’s were by far the most evil civilization in ASOIAF. The most horrific parts of Rome, Mordor, and the third reich combined from what we can glean from them.

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Valar_morghulis

This book is unique it’s a timeline that no one dared to write because of lack of information so it all about the authors imagination so i hope authors don’t stop writing because of bad reviews or lack of ideas if you lack ideas you can always put a vote and consult readers , hope you the best of luck author

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Skull_of_Life

I didn't really like it, the construction of the world is quite interesting and still ancient Valyria, but the hero... Sediment. If you think that I just decided to write a negative review, then just read 2 fan fiction and you will understand why I have such an attitude towards MC. Reborn as a Bolton. GOT : Reborn as a Frey.

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Devastator_21

It's good, the writing is brilliant as well and the world-building is very good as well, the characters are well written I can't wait to see how this story progresses.

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DarlingNico

Great story all around. The characters have depth and their own POV which is nice and the MC is fun to read about. The hypocrisy in the this novel is a little much but it makes sense in its own way. All around a great story that I would love to keep reading.

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Secret_God

It’s been great so far, one of the best ASOIAF fics that doesn’t start in Westeros. The Author has done a great job of building the background for a dragon house in Old Valyria. I like how he’s trying to do something different, that isn’t choosing to follow the Targaryens as lost puppies or sharing Westeros by going to Skagos. Keep it up Author and I’m greatly enjoy how it will turn out.

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Lucius_DeAth

El fanfic no es malo, pero esta lejos de ser bueno, la historia es aburrida, un protagonista muy carismΓ‘tico, pero de trama aburrida, ojalΓ‘ mejore en los siguientes capΓ­tulos y veamos acciΓ³n!

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David_Sooman

Great start to an alternate timeline of old Valayria. Love seeing new characters and settings to your typical fic. Finished chapter 30 and I am hoping you start going into politics more and have our MC bri g more new tech!

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TheSpiritOfWater

Very interesting. I hope it will be quite a long piece. (1001010101010010101010101010101010101010100101010101010101010101010101010100110010101001101010101010101010)

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Rebekah_Willey

Very good story More chapter update please πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™ I liked the story πŸ€©πŸ€©πŸ€©πŸ€©πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ˜˜πŸ˜˜πŸ˜˜πŸ˜˜πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ’―πŸ’―πŸ’―πŸ’―

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Pavanicks

Enjoyable reading for me. As of C28, a light read, nice and wholesome, Targaryen wholesome. It's a developing story, I'm giving it 5 stars for the potential of what it could become, I believe this one will go far.

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Truth_Only_Reader

Writing Quality: 5 Stars Grammar is good, very few mistakes and it's a good story in general. I like the idea of someone being from a Valyrian household and how the political structure of Old Valyria in your stories works. Overall it is a very nice story and I will keep reading it with this quality. Story Development: 4 Stars The reason why I gave it this, is because it didn't make sense how the MC, went to the Free Cities, and the North without reasoning and the timeskips and all of his relationships were rushed. There was little to no buildup. There really wasn't a cause or good transition in my personal opinion. Especially how we were randomly put into a spot where a Magister Daughter got killed and an all put war in Lys is happening. You gave us little to no context in that part and I was confuse if I was reading the same story. I feel like you need more build up in those parts and then hit us with the consequences or the significance of it. Character Design: 5 Stars It was descriptive and very nice. You were perfect in this regard. Updating Stability: 5 Stars Good updates so far from what I've seen. World Background: 5 Stars Very descriptive on the world and how everything worked in the world of ASOIAF, keep doing what you are doing with this part. Conclusion: Good story overall, just work on your transition and it'll be perfect.

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W_D_3766

the lore is pretty inaccurate but the story is well written and very interesting that keeps u reading. definitely recommended for any fans

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Cush_550

nice story please more i would like if you explaint the timeline :) it is up to you :]

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Tesouraria_Lac

Nice fanfiction Snznzksksjsjzjnsjwksnxifgehw 1uhwr8dhdbsndjf Sjxbdjdjsijwbsdbdjjshsbdhdudueuegevdvffbdjsjsjksjxnxxjxixjzijsjsjddjdjxjxndjsjsjsjfjjfbfbfhfduduwiuwehrhdhfhfb Sjshddjisjssjjdjddjdjjxjsnszjzjdkkddiidjdjddjjddjsjsijsdjdjdjisjasnsjsjsj

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ClstlKnght09

Checked the story and read it whether it's good or not, but got me quite hooked after reading it. Especially since discussing about the tales of dragonlords before the doom. I wish the author can also tackle the other continets as they are clearly a good choice for a new twist in the story.

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xsailos
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its pretty good, adds lore and is fun to read

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Aaron_Seddon_0599

Updated often and the story has me hooked read until chapter 24 as of now and Author Great work so far .

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Mr_Chess

it's great author let's see we're this story shall head to.

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Jasonenrick

After 75k words I'd like to have my say, so that any new readers might have a bit of an overview. I wouldn't say it's special or impressive, but interesting enough if are bored at the moment and need something to pass time. I wrote the first 10-20 chapters way before the other chapters and they weren't good in terms of content, nor were they very sophisticated, so I understand if most people are put off when they read the first chapters, but I guess there's nothing I can do about that. I try my best to incorporate people's ideas and suggestions into my story and listen to what the readers want and that's how my story is. A mix of chaos and creativity coming together. Hope you like it :D

3mth
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scott_binder

Honestly love that there’s a story before the fall of Valeria. The wold building and characters are great, it just splits the story’s attention away from the MC and trys to tell the story from a random person’s perspective. Otherwise love that the story opens up at the very end (chp.72so far) and really look forward to it continuing!

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_DEKIM_

The novel is good, but Yuri, no thanks. And the protagonist falls in love with a prostitute, nothing against prostitutes, but I personally found it kind of meh. But the novel is good.πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘

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Melshan

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2mth
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Eruvadhor

The author said that he didn't put much effort in researching to write this fic, but I have to say, the quality is very good, the characters feels alive and he's adept to "show not tell"

2mth
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GrandElderXi

few chapters in, and everything seems great so far thank you authorπŸ™πŸΌπŸ«‘

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Unhonored

I really enjoy this story. It's one of the best fanfictions I've read so far, and believe me, I have over 911 hours of reading time on this app alone and have finished 913 books. I hope you continue uploading chapters until the story's conclusion.

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Haroon_Patel

Good stuff! Thanks for sharing this with us.

2mth
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DaoistkxGQYF

Found this a couple of days ago and have really enjoyed it so far. The concept the author is using of the setting and time period being in old valariya is unique and don’t think I’ve really seen used before. The update schedule and grammar are all pretty good as well, the one thing I would slightly like to see a little more of would be the application of magic itself. Overall this has been a great story and hope author keeps up the good work

3mth
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jesus_5209

Eh leΓ­do hasta ahora hasta el capΓ­tulo 32, me ha parecido interesante, no es lo mejor de lo mejor pero es interesante y entretenido si estΓ‘s aburrido, lo que si quisiera saber es en quΓ© aΓ±o estΓ‘ hasta la destrucciΓ³n de valyria y pues recomendable si estΓ‘ aburrido y te gustan los fanfics de game of thrones

3mth
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Trafford

So... finally, a kingdom-building ASOIAF fanfic set in the times of the Valyria... there is really, heavy deficit of them as most would just get dropped overtime, we shall see how this will develop though for now, it is solid 10/10

3mth
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Daioista

I read up to chapter 5, the story is still not very captivating, I have a question author, did you portray Valyria as the brutal empire they were? Because like... Valyrian’s were by far the most evil civilization in ASOIAF. The most horrific parts of Rome, Mordor, and the third reich combined from what we can glean from them.

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Valar_morghulis

This book is unique it’s a timeline that no one dared to write because of lack of information so it all about the authors imagination so i hope authors don’t stop writing because of bad reviews or lack of ideas if you lack ideas you can always put a vote and consult readers , hope you the best of luck author

3mth
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Skull_of_Life

I didn't really like it, the construction of the world is quite interesting and still ancient Valyria, but the hero... Sediment. If you think that I just decided to write a negative review, then just read 2 fan fiction and you will understand why I have such an attitude towards MC. Reborn as a Bolton. GOT : Reborn as a Frey.

3mth
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Devastator_21

It's good, the writing is brilliant as well and the world-building is very good as well, the characters are well written I can't wait to see how this story progresses.

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DarlingNico

Great story all around. The characters have depth and their own POV which is nice and the MC is fun to read about. The hypocrisy in the this novel is a little much but it makes sense in its own way. All around a great story that I would love to keep reading.

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Secret_God

It’s been great so far, one of the best ASOIAF fics that doesn’t start in Westeros. The Author has done a great job of building the background for a dragon house in Old Valyria. I like how he’s trying to do something different, that isn’t choosing to follow the Targaryens as lost puppies or sharing Westeros by going to Skagos. Keep it up Author and I’m greatly enjoy how it will turn out.

3mth
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Lucius_DeAth

El fanfic no es malo, pero esta lejos de ser bueno, la historia es aburrida, un protagonista muy carismΓ‘tico, pero de trama aburrida, ojalΓ‘ mejore en los siguientes capΓ­tulos y veamos acciΓ³n!

4mth
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David_Sooman

Great start to an alternate timeline of old Valayria. Love seeing new characters and settings to your typical fic. Finished chapter 30 and I am hoping you start going into politics more and have our MC bri g more new tech!

4mth
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TheSpiritOfWater

Very interesting. I hope it will be quite a long piece. (1001010101010010101010101010101010101010100101010101010101010101010101010100110010101001101010101010101010)

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Rebekah_Willey

Very good story More chapter update please πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™πŸ™ I liked the story πŸ€©πŸ€©πŸ€©πŸ€©πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ˜πŸ˜˜πŸ˜˜πŸ˜˜πŸ˜˜πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ’―πŸ’―πŸ’―πŸ’―

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Pavanicks

Enjoyable reading for me. As of C28, a light read, nice and wholesome, Targaryen wholesome. It's a developing story, I'm giving it 5 stars for the potential of what it could become, I believe this one will go far.

4mth
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Truth_Only_Reader

Writing Quality: 5 Stars Grammar is good, very few mistakes and it's a good story in general. I like the idea of someone being from a Valyrian household and how the political structure of Old Valyria in your stories works. Overall it is a very nice story and I will keep reading it with this quality. Story Development: 4 Stars The reason why I gave it this, is because it didn't make sense how the MC, went to the Free Cities, and the North without reasoning and the timeskips and all of his relationships were rushed. There was little to no buildup. There really wasn't a cause or good transition in my personal opinion. Especially how we were randomly put into a spot where a Magister Daughter got killed and an all put war in Lys is happening. You gave us little to no context in that part and I was confuse if I was reading the same story. I feel like you need more build up in those parts and then hit us with the consequences or the significance of it. Character Design: 5 Stars It was descriptive and very nice. You were perfect in this regard. Updating Stability: 5 Stars Good updates so far from what I've seen. World Background: 5 Stars Very descriptive on the world and how everything worked in the world of ASOIAF, keep doing what you are doing with this part. Conclusion: Good story overall, just work on your transition and it'll be perfect.

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W_D_3766

the lore is pretty inaccurate but the story is well written and very interesting that keeps u reading. definitely recommended for any fans

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Cush_550

nice story please more i would like if you explaint the timeline :) it is up to you :]

4mth
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Tesouraria_Lac

Nice fanfiction Snznzksksjsjzjnsjwksnxifgehw 1uhwr8dhdbsndjf Sjxbdjdjsijwbsdbdjjshsbdhdudueuegevdvffbdjsjsjksjxnxxjxixjzijsjsjddjdjxjxndjsjsjsjfjjfbfbfhfduduwiuwehrhdhfhfb Sjshddjisjssjjdjddjdjjxjsnszjzjdkkddiidjdjddjjddjsjsijsdjdjdjisjasnsjsjsj

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ClstlKnght09

Checked the story and read it whether it's good or not, but got me quite hooked after reading it. Especially since discussing about the tales of dragonlords before the doom. I wish the author can also tackle the other continets as they are clearly a good choice for a new twist in the story.

4mth
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xsailos
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its pretty good, adds lore and is fun to read

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Aaron_Seddon_0599

Updated often and the story has me hooked read until chapter 24 as of now and Author Great work so far .

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Mr_Chess

it's great author let's see we're this story shall head to.

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