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It was good until the story doubled up on a chapter and the following chapters were a jumbled up mess of paragraphs not in order. It became no longer understandable and after a couple more chapters to see if it fixed itself out, it unfortunately didn't.
Hey! I hope you’re doing well. I just wanted to say how much I admire your amazing writing talent—your story really left an impression on me, and I’d love to chat with you about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist and have worked on comics with authors across different platforms. I genuinely think your story would make a fantastic comic! You can also check out my work on DeviantArt under the name VanessaWick Feel free to reach out to me on Discord: losserishere Or on Twitter: @tirtatare
it was good till all chapters and paragraphs mixed up..................................................................................................... Original Fanfic name? Anyone?
After chapter 66 everything felt like a walking fever dream to read i got such a bad headache now damn but overall fairly decent up till chapter 66
How did you mess up the story after chapter 66, everything is mixed up and unclear. How did you mess up the story after chapter 66, everything is mixed up and unclear. How did you mess up the story after chapter 66, everything is mixed up and unclear.
Se ve que es una traducción del chino, se puede tolerar un poco eso. El cambio de nombre entre capitulos o en algunos casos en el mismo capitulo los traduce en 3 formas diferentes. Pero despues del capitulo 65 cada parrafo esta mezclado, parace un rompecabezas mal armado.
Dude, you need an editor. The names keep changing, which is disconcerting and messes with the flow of the story. I like it so far but in each paragraph the names change and the POV switches are random if you find someone to fix that then this story would drastically improve.
The novel is good, but I need more chapters, and lately the paragraphs in the last chapters are very disorganized. I would appreciate it if you could give me the link to the original translation or where you got this novel from.
its a 3 star for me some wrong pronouns wrong spelling wrong names and other problems if ur desperate read it its kinda mid just to past time i guess
Great novel I would really recommend, just wish there was more chapters so I can bing. Anyway keep up the good work
C'est une bonne fanfiction, j'aime bien ! ! le mc est un peu arrogant, et sa personnalité est un peu frustrante, mais l'histoire en elle même est cool et j'aime bien le style de reconstruire une civilisation !!
average chinese slop it’s garbage and so weirdly worded. this would’ve been better if you just wrote it yourself and not just MTL
It was good until the story doubled up on a chapter and the following chapters were a jumbled up mess of paragraphs not in order. It became no longer understandable and after a couple more chapters to see if it fixed itself out, it unfortunately didn't.
Hey! I hope you’re doing well. I just wanted to say how much I admire your amazing writing talent—your story really left an impression on me, and I’d love to chat with you about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist and have worked on comics with authors across different platforms. I genuinely think your story would make a fantastic comic! You can also check out my work on DeviantArt under the name VanessaWick Feel free to reach out to me on Discord: losserishere Or on Twitter: @tirtatare
it was good till all chapters and paragraphs mixed up..................................................................................................... Original Fanfic name? Anyone?
After chapter 66 everything felt like a walking fever dream to read i got such a bad headache now damn but overall fairly decent up till chapter 66
How did you mess up the story after chapter 66, everything is mixed up and unclear. How did you mess up the story after chapter 66, everything is mixed up and unclear. How did you mess up the story after chapter 66, everything is mixed up and unclear.
Se ve que es una traducción del chino, se puede tolerar un poco eso. El cambio de nombre entre capitulos o en algunos casos en el mismo capitulo los traduce en 3 formas diferentes. Pero despues del capitulo 65 cada parrafo esta mezclado, parace un rompecabezas mal armado.
Dude, you need an editor. The names keep changing, which is disconcerting and messes with the flow of the story. I like it so far but in each paragraph the names change and the POV switches are random if you find someone to fix that then this story would drastically improve.
The novel is good, but I need more chapters, and lately the paragraphs in the last chapters are very disorganized. I would appreciate it if you could give me the link to the original translation or where you got this novel from.
its a 3 star for me some wrong pronouns wrong spelling wrong names and other problems if ur desperate read it its kinda mid just to past time i guess
Great novel I would really recommend, just wish there was more chapters so I can bing. Anyway keep up the good work
C'est une bonne fanfiction, j'aime bien ! ! le mc est un peu arrogant, et sa personnalité est un peu frustrante, mais l'histoire en elle même est cool et j'aime bien le style de reconstruire une civilisation !!
average chinese slop it’s garbage and so weirdly worded. this would’ve been better if you just wrote it yourself and not just MTL