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Biggest issue right now: Needs major editing and grammar corrections. Needs an editor to keep up with the translator. Essentially Translation speed is very good, but lots of minor errors are left behind. Some major things at the beginning which may turn way potential readers. Pros: Overall it’s a good start. While we haven’t yet reached the level of strength and fame, MC shows in the synopsis, it’s a good start in setting up character and world building.
love this book can't wait for more. interesting approach with the insect controlling.
this has good potential I can tell English isn't your first Language but everything takes time. I'd recommend grammarly to help you find any mistakes you might make. also I'd recommend that when your English is better go over and edit any mistakes so your story can go farther and get more people to love it.
starting with world background: other land mass are mentioned not going into any details, the town where the story takes place (first 40 chp) is split into 3 parts with no active descriptions, few building names given left vaguely mentioned, confuses names of areas such as Black Pine Forest then gets turned into Black Fog Forest. Updating Stability was left at a 3 for me as a base. Characters are given very brief descriptions: MC family is a bunch of stickfigures at the best none given clothes, hair, face, eyes no sort of descriptions. Story is slow paced at one point the group wanders a forest for three to four days without any actual significance to storyline development. Often things don't add up or even are explained: Guard Captin is poisoned by a porcupine (not given any magically properties we are made aware of) even though they are hunting boars and at no point are porcupines mentioned before this instance. Which causes story derailment and overall breaking of any sort of immersion. I hope to see a rewritten version of the story however considering payment is needed by the 28th or 29th chapter which hardly has time to establish a strong tie or desire to continue the story I doubt I would come back. Best of Luck with your story. Overall it's got some fun ideas but without a rewritten or reviewed concept I can't see myself paying for the content.
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Love this story. The world building and characters are a level above most stories on this site.
The story is great and flows beautifully… the MC is careful and pace slowly like a true Magus… hope it will get more updates
Review at chapter 59. So far, I am hooked on this story. Wish I had another few hundred chapters to binge. System used is simplified compared to most stories but that actually enhances this story and keeps the focus on world building and the MC.
so far it's good , the pace just a lil bit slow but still good with no sudden power up, still need to practice and work for it, the mc have a gold finger like any other reborn/transmigration story his was like a panel game to level up skill but with no system. overall if you like this kind of genre, then this one can be an option to read.
Biggest issue right now: Needs major editing and grammar corrections. Needs an editor to keep up with the translator. Essentially Translation speed is very good, but lots of minor errors are left behind. Some major things at the beginning which may turn way potential readers. Pros: Overall it’s a good start. While we haven’t yet reached the level of strength and fame, MC shows in the synopsis, it’s a good start in setting up character and world building.
love this book can't wait for more. interesting approach with the insect controlling.
this has good potential I can tell English isn't your first Language but everything takes time. I'd recommend grammarly to help you find any mistakes you might make. also I'd recommend that when your English is better go over and edit any mistakes so your story can go farther and get more people to love it.
starting with world background: other land mass are mentioned not going into any details, the town where the story takes place (first 40 chp) is split into 3 parts with no active descriptions, few building names given left vaguely mentioned, confuses names of areas such as Black Pine Forest then gets turned into Black Fog Forest. Updating Stability was left at a 3 for me as a base. Characters are given very brief descriptions: MC family is a bunch of stickfigures at the best none given clothes, hair, face, eyes no sort of descriptions. Story is slow paced at one point the group wanders a forest for three to four days without any actual significance to storyline development. Often things don't add up or even are explained: Guard Captin is poisoned by a porcupine (not given any magically properties we are made aware of) even though they are hunting boars and at no point are porcupines mentioned before this instance. Which causes story derailment and overall breaking of any sort of immersion. I hope to see a rewritten version of the story however considering payment is needed by the 28th or 29th chapter which hardly has time to establish a strong tie or desire to continue the story I doubt I would come back. Best of Luck with your story. Overall it's got some fun ideas but without a rewritten or reviewed concept I can't see myself paying for the content.
Reveal Spoiler Love this story. The world building and characters are a level above most stories on this site.
The story is great and flows beautifully… the MC is careful and pace slowly like a true Magus… hope it will get more updates
Review at chapter 59. So far, I am hooked on this story. Wish I had another few hundred chapters to binge. System used is simplified compared to most stories but that actually enhances this story and keeps the focus on world building and the MC.
so far it's good , the pace just a lil bit slow but still good with no sudden power up, still need to practice and work for it, the mc have a gold finger like any other reborn/transmigration story his was like a panel game to level up skill but with no system. overall if you like this kind of genre, then this one can be an option to read.