Hello author, I like the your style a lot but I would prefer to read this novel as a book. Waiting for each chapter when such an intense fight is going on is such a tease.. you continue this and may have to suffer a drop in reader base.
to describe eyes use shining, bright, beaming, glint .. Limpid just does not cut it.
And instead of dull gold use dark gold. After all it is your words that are the brush strokes of our imagination.
Hah, I don't even know what to feel anymore. I'm knida looking for Ai Hui, and I was like "what the * are u doing out there in the sideline? Do u really wanna die just like that? Where's the so called tenacity of urs?". On the other hand, I was also like "😁😁😁" with matching speechless-look if that's even possible, while reading some comments. Heehee