Please edit and re-release the first chapters. Could not get past the first half of chapter one due to all the grammatical errors. For an English reader it is very offputting to think that the author thought it was acceptable to publish their work without a proper edit. I am not able to stomach reading past the first chapter with the sheer number of incorrect sentences I had to make sense of.
I like the idea behind the novel and love political struggles/strategy/kingdom building/action/adventure but I hate improper English.
Why do we have a community of virtual reality game novels. It sounds like someone is reading a novel inside of a novel we are reading, like in inception dream inside of a dream...
Can someone please explain what do you enjoy in this kind of novel, to someone like me who hasn't read a single novel like this, but is willing to try?
I could not take the bad grammar, I read someone said it will be better. They might be right. However, usually people just get used to it over time.
Character development in the start is shallow and copied. Story is a typical "MC is a never bored character that can train forever without stopping and needs money for his sick mother, but could not finish more that high school"
Might be better later, but I would bet it is just average.
Awesome novel to delve into.. the imagination of the author is literally ’out of the world’ ..it’s a smart read for readers who don’t want an all-powerful OP for whom things just fall into lap as the plot progresses. The storyline is influenced by lot of cultures. If you move past the grammatical mistakes and slight faulty sentence structuring, you can see the author real life persona and his way of life. Since I’m a dreamer whose life is bit similar to author(May be that’s why I’m so partial to him), I’m a big fan of all his works. Keep dreaming , keep reading this fictional character, may be your real world problems will be away from your mind while you’re reading this fiction novel. Cheerio .
It's obvious the young age of the author, based on the design and decision of the characters. My advice to him is - keep you head high and continue developing in the desired field !
Writing is decent, updates are frequent and the story is nice enough if you like the start, but don't expect anything else that what you sign up for.
Characters are a bit bland and one dimensional, their decision are based on the understanding of the world of a teenager and are straightforward.
World is our reality put against a game-world, my problem with that is most authors writing in that genre are not fully understand both of them and their work seem very far away from the reality and cannot make you sink in it and immerse in their world.
If you like gaming novels and are O.K. with the first 10-15 chapters, you will enjoy this read.
This is literally a LMS fanfic and a bad one at that. There is nothing wrong with gaining inspiration, but ripping the MCs motivation to play the game, the games creators motivation to create the game, the entire login and character-creation sequence from LMS is just too much for me to overlook, and i last read that novel 3 years ago, yet could instantly point this out.
Uninstall life pls.
Okay so. I'm only in the first few chapters but I have to say: this is really so disappointing. I've heard that the grammar and stuff gets fixed later on but how the hell does that help the early chapters?
Those chapters really need to be edited and gone over by someone so it doesn't drive off all the new people who are attempting to read this novel seriously.
The fact that you've made this novel into a premium where we require the use of Ss's or fast passes to read is just a freaking disgrace. If you would go back and edit your starting chapters maybe then you'll be able to retain a decent amount of people.
From looking through all of the grammatical errors and mistakes, the story actually looks interesting and something I'd enjoy. So, I'll continue reading on and try to push until the edits start showing up. But yeah, I recommend you get your stuff together and fix your older chapters or at least get rid of your premium so that we don't have to pay to read a story with mistakes.
Thank you for taking the time to read my review.
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Attractive summary..hmm...its gotten my attention and has kept it for now, right...so its gotta be a great story🤨lol❗😉
Im gonna give this a good chance, I mean I have been looking for a good reading for awhile and this has a story that was able to stir my interest. I think thats GGRRRREEEATT🐯 I will find this to be a good read in the end right? 😜😜🙃😳RIGHT❗🤞🤞😗😙😗😙🥰heehee
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This story is like a fan friction of trojan war.... I like trojan war... And hero he is like he got the intelligence of Ulysses and Achilles might, even his boby. He even got the same weakness as Achilles heel.... I love this nobel
This novel is great. It gives you a character that has an actual life, backstory, and also thinks like no other. I recommend this novel to anyone who want a story of how a real human being can solve problem in another world.
I say, don't give up on this novel because of the very, very bad grammar in the first chapters.
Also, you might think that this is a version of Moonlight Sculptor, and that the MC is like Weed. It looks like, but it is not.
Although the development of the history is fast and you can't get yourself to like some of the characters, but you might like it nonetheless.