Reviews of When back in Time by dillydally_girl - Webnovel

Not sure what the significance is for writing Tagalog when your characters understand each other but it is different. As for the story, it would probably flow better if you worked on your grammar, spelling and spacing. In Chapter five you have the god of time saying that the FL ate Clara? Not sure what you were going with that but if she really was going to eat Clara please expand or explain. Cannibalism from someone who tries to help others, wow you got imagination! Never apologize for how short or long your chapters are, you be you and write until you are satisfied. How old is your FL? I know she's in school but I assumed like young... So on to the review. Based on only the first 5 chapters, grammar is mediocre, it disrupts the flow of the story pulling you out of the whatever scene you are picturing. Some spelling mistakes and some paragraphs are mistakenly broken. Characters are still developing, too early to figure out what's going on but this can also be a negative. FL is definitely stubborn, lacks patience and wisdom but is a driven by selflessness. It's a solid foundation and makes you want to read more just so you can see her growth but the time god... Is still a giant question mark, sadistic or bored, read more chapters to find out. World background/development, not a lot to go by but is more then the others I've read, so good effort and keep it up. Time travel, mystery and FL who thinks they can save the world... Why not?