While the story is pretty good, the Grammer is awful. It feels like it written with 8 year olds English skills. It also wrongly overuses the most annoying word that every time I see it used as a descriptor makes me want to reach through the computer and smack the author. The word "like".
At chapter 4. I have several issues with this over. 7 yrs old MC regains past live memories and suddenly he can perform several types of magic??? Like how?? He was not a wizard in past life. Envelope if he know he has magic, how does he know the usage of it and to do transfiguration, illusion and other types suddenly is too forced. Can see from these 4 chapter that this novel is garbage.
The writing starts off at a really bad quality, like hard to read quality.
I feel nothing really pulling me into the story, not feeling any drive coming through the writing. Just a badly planned plot that seems very on the spot.
I will give you full score coz I hope you will update more in the future. And PLS NO HAREM!!!!!!!!!! LIKE SERIOUSLY!! but overall I love the story so far. Keep going I hope unlike most fanfics with potential you will continue to update periodicly and go beyond at least 80 chapters coz its annoying when this good fanfics stop and are dropped halfway.
I liked the story and its characters, especially Bella and the hat. Your writing needs a bit of work because sometimes I get lost while reading or I dont know what you're trying to say.
Overall, I love this novel and I hope you continue writing more chapters!!
I like OP protagonists. Only if their power isn’t just for bragging and look cool. In other words, if their power is useful.
If all the protagonist is going to do is be a bystander/lurker to canon events, with very little changes from canon, then there is no point in being in the canon timeline. Letting a character be miserable just to follow canon, when you don’t like how miserable the character was, is even more unforgivable to me.
For someone who didn’t want to be isolated, and went to Hufflepuff, there is hardly anything about interactions with classmates and friends. It’s all about soul magic cultivation, for a goal that isn’t on a tight schedule. He still has decades after Hogwart to deal with it.
It’s slightly boring.
SO far as i can see great Harry Potter Fan-Fic. Not enough stability of updates. Not enough of view of Muggleborn in this world and to easy for MC. No real challenges for MC. I can understand that challenges will start will main plot Harry Potter plot but still would be good to read about some in 1-2 year of Hogwarts.
Great story, hope you could do it well... Don't worry, it may not look like a lot of guy and girls reading your fiction in the comment section, but it's not.. There's thousand of people reading it, but they just didn't comment.. So, don't feel down... You still have a lot of fans waiting for new chapter!!!
1) Your MC is super OP.
Knowledge about his past life already cheat, but you're still adding more cheats:
- Soul Phoenix from owl (it's not pokemon to evolve like that)
- Winchester knowledge ( where it came from, if he's normal muggleborn)
- OP Artifact Hat
- oh, and don't forget this "Magic CORE" ****
Anything of this OP by itself, but together... You'll just drop this fan-fic soon, because:
1) it's boring as hell
2) to OP, if he'll not kill Volandemort with all his powers in 3-4 years that's will be really weird.
Right now your fun-fic looks like "Cheat Engine".