(Hiatus?) Naruto: The Fool

LV 3

Lostintales

................................................................................................................................................. its a good story but there is little to no description about the Mc and the other characters. The story is a bit fast paced and less detailed, like how he was gone for a year and after coming back no one investigated or asked him any question and he freely adopts a children, it sounds pretty unrealistic.

LV 14

Gotha

It's too fast paced for me and the MC was gone for 1 year and there was no investigation like he didn't even exist in the beginning.........

LV 2

3David

It feels a little bit rushed. But overall the story is okay atleast and grammar and spelling are okay. ////////////////////////////////////

LV 5

whitethief274

I m very picky when it comes to giving a review writing quality is ok enough ,story is developing in a mingled way because mc has to go other worlds not like it is wrong but plot is not arranged properly don't know how to explain it so I will leave it at this , characters are defined simply they don't have a kick for 5 stars, updating stability is good, background is totally mingled same as story development you know different worlds different rules. yup that sums it up. one more thing , genjutsu does not work on the individual who don't have chakra pathways or chakra in particular so it will not work on otherworldly beings.💩

LV 1

victor_dupretz

More chapter please ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////

LV 1

Natsu_Dragonell

The story is good, the rules are good. Everything's good, so please beg you not to drop this. .؟.................................................... ِ...............

LV 3

Herohero

so far (I'm in chapter 8) the story isn't bad I would even say this interesting (Mc is a bit of a prankster but he wasn't yet shown to sign to be a Beta Mc). And for information this a multiverse fanfic (often they are abandoned) so if you don't mind you .Go have a look (Google translate).

LV 4

Gd_Sys

moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee