Evolution: From Little Devil to Devil Empress

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Addicted_To_Coffee

Obligatory shameless review by the author. You can use this review to ask any questions regarding the book, as well as give any constructive feedback you may have. Please keep it civil.

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Hollow_Moon

Love the main character, the plotting of all the characters is great, no one’s an idiot.

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Leon_Noxil

Score: 7/10 Critical Review: A decent book but still rough around the edges A very nicely written book with very few errors. The story is engaging and shows a clear sense of progression — it’s an enjoyable experience overall. Hopefully, the book gains more attention in the future. Now, for some constructive criticism: ⸻ 1. Character Development The book lacks proper personality development. The main character’s base personality isn’t well portrayed. Yes, she has her quirks — being a hygiene freak, her appreciation of beauty, and her hobby of painting — but that alone isn’t enough to build a compelling personality. I understand that she’s meant to be cold and ruthless, but that trait becomes monotonous after a while. As for the side characters, there isn’t much depth or variety to them either. ⸻ 2. Pacing and Engagement The pacing of the story is generally good, but at times it feels dull. Yes, events are happening, but I often find myself asking, “Now what?” In general, if you don’t focus deeply on character personality, you need to compensate by keeping the story dynamic. A good example is Quinn Talon from My Vampire System. The book was poor in terms of personality development — Quinn was hollow for most of the story — yet it remained popular because the author kept readers constantly engaged. There was always something happening, leaving no downtime for readers to dwell on the lack of character growth. ⸻ 3. The Main Character’s Gender I know this might sound stereotypical, but the fact that the main character is female doesn’t currently add anything meaningful to the story. Having a female protagonist offers the opportunity to present the world through a different perspective — with unique decision-making and emotional depth. At this stage, if the main character were replaced with a male one, I doubt much would change. ⸻ Final Thoughts All in all, this is a very good debut book for a new author. There’s clear potential, but also room for improvement — especially in developing the characters’ personalities and making the story feel more dynamic.

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DaoistvkJEtO

love devil story's, even better with fml. will there be harem ?

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Aakash_vardhan_4877

although setting is not very unique, great story delivery and progression. story pace is pretty good too. Mc is not stupid, uses her brain but not perfect making her quite realistic. i just feel that she is being saved by plot armour a bit frequently. the world is also quite well developed

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benny69

Big fan mc good and direction of the story is also good 👍

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_blank69_

God i love this book! Huge potential for future hope it keeps developing!

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Xerxes_99

This book is awesome! The writing, setting, and MC are all really well done! Can’t wait for more chapters!

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Shadow_Marvelle

There's quite a few things I like about this story so far, the devil world has a very interesting setup, the abilities are described very well and each character so far has very unique descriptions. I have a couple questions I figured I'd ask here as well 1. Single FL? 2. Do you plan to introduce a love interest early or do you think she'll be introduced later on? 3. Is every layer of the devil world "contained" or do some layers mix with realms of different species, for example humans, angels etc?

𝐇𝐢! 🌸 𝐉𝐮𝐬𝐭 𝐰𝐚𝐧𝐭𝐞𝐝 𝐭𝐨 𝐬𝐚𝐲 𝐈 𝐥𝐨𝐯𝐞𝐝 𝐲𝐨𝐮𝐫 𝐬𝐭𝐨𝐫𝐲 𝐢𝐭’𝐬 𝐟𝐮𝐥𝐥 𝐨𝐟 𝐞𝐦𝐨𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐝𝐞𝐩𝐭𝐡! 𝐈’𝐦 𝐚 𝐜𝐨𝐦𝐢𝐜 𝐚𝐫𝐭𝐢𝐬𝐭 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐝𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐢𝐭 𝐠𝐚𝐯𝐞 𝐦𝐞 𝐬𝐨 𝐦𝐚𝐧𝐲 𝐯𝐢𝐬𝐮𝐚𝐥 𝐢𝐝𝐞𝐚𝐬. 𝐃𝐨 𝐲𝐨𝐮 𝐞𝐯𝐞𝐫 𝐬𝐞𝐞 𝐲𝐨𝐮𝐫 𝐜𝐡𝐚𝐫𝐚𝐜𝐭𝐞𝐫𝐬 𝐨𝐫 𝐬𝐜𝐞𝐧𝐞𝐬 𝐢𝐧 𝐜𝐨𝐦𝐢𝐜 𝐟𝐨𝐫𝐦? 💫