This feels like a throw-away chapter for wordcount. Hopefully this won't be a recurring theme.
Only thing i can think of is the bounty for his head. It's an open contract, so any ninja can take it.
"It doesn't matter. Our primary objective was to intercept Orochimaru and prevent him from returning to the front lines. Better yet, to kill him here. As for the traitor, if we stumble upon him, we'll take him in."
Naruto: Building Insect Kingdom
Anime & Comics · FyLuf16701
So he obsessively studied anatomy, trained as a field medic, and even knows enough to do those face transplants.....but he doesn't know how to heal? That makes zero sense.
His movements were precise and clinical. He had practiced this. During his years in the Leaf, he had served as a temporary field medic and had spent his private hours obsessively studying human anatomy.
Naruto: Building Insect Kingdom
Anime & Comics · FyLuf16701
I'll give 5 stars for now just because it doesn't follow all the usual Aburame MC patterns, but while this isn't the usual "system" nonsense, it definitely could have been tailored without the magical powers being so outside the Naruto universe powerset. I would suggest adding more background to the MC, maybe even flashbacks to his childhood, just to get some more world building and character development.
Money? He gave him just barely enough to survive. Naruto was always broke.
"Assign the best medical ninja. Ensure that the child survives at all costs. All expenses will be drawn from my private account."
Naruto: Building Insect Kingdom
Anime & Comics · FyLuf16701
Not sure where the high scores are coming from, other than bots. This is basically a power wish fulfillment story with no pattern or real limits to the power set. The power also doesn't mash well with the Naruto universe powers, so the author should have chosen a different character from bleach. Literally any other power would have made more sense in the context of chakra and causality.
The broke ass parents that rely on their child’s inventions are cutting off the guy from his own money? In what world is that going to happen? The father might be dead already if his son didn’t bank roll him into not taking anymore missions. Stupid writing
Wow, what a way to ruin your story in a single chapter. So you have an Aburame that has been nerfed for some reason to not be good at his clan jutsu? Why? You could have just made a civilian MC then. Wasted potential. Also, the idea of cutting in EVERYONE on their proprietary business is nonsense logic. It’d be one thing if they weren’t part of the most powerful village in the world. But not only do they have that backing, they are a founding clan as well. You think anyone would risk stealing or attacking them, only to risk becoming an enemy of the rest of the village? Nope 👎. All Sarutobi are chunin or ABOVE? Do you realize the power scaling issue with ninja ranks? Jonin do t grow on trees, its a very high bar that few ninja achieve in their whole lifetime, it just something you get as a field promotion even in wartime, you need specific level of skills. And hiruzen was widely considered one of the strongest ninja in the world. Nobody sane would think otherwise, even in enemy nations. There is just too much history revision in this novel.
Wasted chapter. Just a suggestion to the author: don't repeat the same ideas for several chapters or obvious actions. For example, you've wasted almost half this chapter, as well as much of previous chapters, describing MC's changes several times, that he stole and ate sheep, Daenerys cried for half the chapter, rehashed what the MC thought about the transformation, and you even wasted time on saying pointless things like Daenerys fell asleep and then woke and realized that she fell asleep. Just WHY? This was pointless and the entire chapter could have been summarized in 2 paragraphs with nothing of substance lost. Focus on the world building. How would you feel if you were reading a Harry Potter novel, only for the whole chapter being based around describing each motion of someone scratching their ass?
Why keep repeating the goals? He's been saying them for several chapters now. Seems like padding the wordcount.
His immediate goals were already set. He needed to gather fate points, find dragon eggs, and revive magic. Only then could he prepare for the Long Night. He just didn't know what kind of nightmare truly lived beyond the Wall. According to the television series he remembered, they were simple, brainless wights. Kill the Night King, and the entire army shatters. If a regular girl could finish the war with a dagger, Merlin could easily do it with magic.
Game Of Thrones: The Queen’s Wizard
Fernsehen · Mr_HL