Hey Mr. Author. One small tip. Just in this first chapter there's a big glaring error: You lack word diversity. In about the first 20 paragraphs you say 'Qin Yi' in like 18 of them. It also happens later in the chapter with a dozen or so paragraphs starting with or containing 'Qin Yi'. Also looking at the start of chapter 2 you do it more. You need to diversify a little bit or it gets tiring to read very quickly.
ch 0 1 The Extraction System Activated
Eastern · Mysterious_Pen
What happened to "I would be taking advantage of his niceness tomorrow"
I could tell dawn was about to arise upon the horizon, so I decided to get up and head towards the capital alone. Even if Alan's character and position intrigued me, I preferred to explore the capital on my own, not holding conversations.
Fantasy · kenkan
Spears aren't really one handed weapons while Swords are....
In fact, now that he considered the topic, Darius was quite surprised as to why spear magicians had not really been featured in media, yet sword-wielding magicians named Spellblades existed. The best explanation he could come up with was that it was most likely an aesthetic thing.
Fantasy · Kotario
That's not how physics work lol....
From Xie Feng's point of view, those people are simply brainless people. When a hand-to-hand fighter enters a ten-foot range, the Archers' arrows stop causing so much damage because they don't have the time to get enough boost. Still, these brainless people only thought of quick wins instead of waiting patiently.
Games · XIETIAN
"Raging face" ????
Harry tore his gaze from the factories to stare at Raymond's raging face, "Thanks."
The Legendary Junkmaster
Fantasy · Antihero