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original Humanities Gilded Cage
Inigo and Farla, siblings, were given to the ‘new age’ at birth. In the industrial city of Blackwood, the group of 13 children known as the ‘new age’ are from a race of ‘full-minds’, people who are born with an even more complex mind than the average human. So complex that even physical objects can bend to their will. But when the new age begin to realise why they are being kept from the rest of the world, Inigo and the rest of them enter a world of danger and peril as they soon discover they are being used for one of humanities biggest wars, threatening not just life on earth, but life beyond the human comprehension. - this is my first story and I hope you will give it a chance! Chapters are random but I will try to out a lot of love and care into this story. Everything is planned ;) - Author1 Chs 0 Sammlungen
Now THIS is a great story. I feel like the tense is a little... off putting however. “He walks away” “he walked away”. the second sounds better right? I feel like this story is an amazing plot, The characters feel so real, The world design is great. however i feel like it would have worked better in past tense format. but who knows, This is just my opinion. very good :)
Walker Of The Worlds
Eastern · Grand_Void_Daoist