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LulzLowKey
male LV 13^^No Game No Life^^ Oshi No Ko has reignited my Depression
2020-08-22 Beigetreten DjiboutiAbzeichen 15
Moments 5673
I believe you asked for criticism on the first chapter. my criticism, why would I care about a story with no story. the system negates any real resource issues and going beyond the power system in pokemon to include one piece powers is kinda iffy at best. pokemon has its owner aura system you can retcon to make for powerful. so inconclusive, no struggle equals no story.
Before Ace could react, his 5 Pokemon rushed out and looked at the Spring, crying out before jumping in!
Pokemon- World's 'Strongest' Trainer
Anime & Comics · AgentMonke
you only need to say a persons name once in most situations unless there is a break.
Rayleigh poured more aura into his sword to raise the number of transformed sword auras circulating the blade, sharpening and strengthening the edge. Rayleigh used Shū, Kō, and Ryū to strengthen his muscles, but upon receiving the impact of T-Bone's sword, he realized it had been overkill since the frighteningly tall man was weaker than Rayleigh's base stats.
The Reincarnator's Tavern
Movies · GnomeBob
that doesn't make much sense. if you put someone in a dangerous situation then save them, you just equalized the debt.
Rayleigh did his best to stop himself from laughing before Wild King was out of ear shot. Yes, Wild King's debt of the Nen and Force lessons was paid, but after their fight, Rayleigh had spared WIld King's life, which was a far greater debt. If Wild King had just accepted Rayleigh's terms at the start, this would not have happened, but since he rejected Rayleigh's kindness, the debt would only increase.
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Movies · GnomeBob
boruto is not good,
And this brought up yet another issue. I had an idea of how Haki, Nen, and the Force would interact, but later I realized that I completely missed something. Sword users in One Piece make even less sense than HAKI! Try re-watching the One Piece fight of Mr. One versus Zoro. There is a scene where Mr. One sends a dozen slashes at Zoro which chops the pillar behind Zoro into pieces but Zoro seems to ignore the damage and then cuts through Mr One and wins. How did he do this? Apparently, by hearing the breath of Mr One's swords he avoided the damage and by doing the same he was able to cut through him. So yeah, One Piece Swordsman Logic allows them to cut metal using metal by being able to hear the breath of metal. I had to figure out how to incorporate that in Ray's future fights.
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Movies · GnomeBob
rereading this, id still rail.
After thinking about it for a moment, he answered, "Santa Claus. Stay away from that crazy bastard."
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Movies · GnomeBob
get back into the content mines and produce more. I know your ip address.
The cursed child and the invisible woman versus the man with the highest cursed energy output in the culling games...aside from Rika.
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
true, honestly don't know how people always judge hiruzen as weak when we only see him during the opening of Naruto when everyone was weak and later in Shippuden when everyone except original Naruto characters are strong.
Itachi Uchiha was the most exemplary and loyal ninja in the history of Hidden Villages, but most of all he was the greatest coward.
Crows x Souls
Anime & Comics · QuackVader
which is more mainstream? halo.
Phew…..westeros couldn't handle that shit….honestly I don't think any other universe could….but that's in the past….somehow…..I don't get how it's in the past so fast especially since it felt like I just died….but whatever…..last thing on the agenda is my new body I guess
A spacewolf in westeros
TV · Love_dem_fanfix
no, your opinion doesn't matter so sit in your corner coloring your Barbie dolls.
Phew…..westeros couldn't handle that shit….honestly I don't think any other universe could….but that's in the past….somehow…..I don't get how it's in the past so fast especially since it felt like I just died….but whatever…..last thing on the agenda is my new body I guess
A spacewolf in westeros
TV · Love_dem_fanfix
kinda cringed at that.
Naohiro moved his head closer and whispered. "*Whisper* Don't think about trying anything with Maki. You must get my approval before anything happens between you two."
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
hoohoohoo are you challenging me?
I give her a closed-eye smile. "I heard Shibuya has a lot of places that would be nice to visit."
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
show weakness and get devoured by negativity. That is life young Padawan
I give her a closed-eye smile. "I heard Shibuya has a lot of places that would be nice to visit."
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
congratumaltions you have achieve the peak webnovel experience
She answered really quickly, "Just cum inside me, baby!"
Hentai: The World Inside Milf
Anime & Comics · In_cest
Ah, the legend himself. How low he has fallen.
I give her a closed-eye smile. "I heard Shibuya has a lot of places that would be nice to visit."
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
yet
Not my problem. I'm not a part of the Zenin clan.
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
I forgot what i was referring to
I like to keep OCs to an absolute minimum because that's not really why we read fanfiction in my opinion and I'll do my best to keep everyone in character with the main series.
MHA: Horizon (Ope-Ope No Mi)
Anime & Comics · keanu_eugene
why is a 7 y.o in junior high?
Turning my head towards the school, I speak up. "Saitama Urami East Junior High."
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
don't worry gang, I gotchu
I shrug. "I showed him the difference between heaven and earth. Young grasshopper wasn't familiar with my game."
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
more like accomplice man
I huff a laugh. "You wouldn't be the first. I want to get stronger because I want to reach the point where nobody can even put a finger on me. I hate weakness, so I'm turning you into an accomplished man rather than a potential man."
Jujutsu Kaisen: Nah I'd Adapt
Anime & Comics · JaxWolf4
cus boruto needed a sequel just to get good. the first part of boruto is so horrendous that I've known fanfics with better plots.
And this brought up yet another issue. I had an idea of how Haki, Nen, and the Force would interact, but later I realized that I completely missed something. Sword users in One Piece make even less sense than HAKI! Try re-watching the One Piece fight of Mr. One versus Zoro. There is a scene where Mr. One sends a dozen slashes at Zoro which chops the pillar behind Zoro into pieces but Zoro seems to ignore the damage and then cuts through Mr One and wins. How did he do this? Apparently, by hearing the breath of Mr One's swords he avoided the damage and by doing the same he was able to cut through him. So yeah, One Piece Swordsman Logic allows them to cut metal using metal by being able to hear the breath of metal. I had to figure out how to incorporate that in Ray's future fights.
The Reincarnator's Tavern
Movies · GnomeBob