You're correct here. What I'm pointing out is the structure of the sentences and how a paragraph explaining a flashback and a paragraph about the present are right next to each other without any indication of which is which. In essence, after reading you'd know that something doesn't make sense, so you'll read again and then understand what is being conveyed by author. And the first time I read it I thought author got jumbled up with how the original long tian died and made him die by falling over a rock (you know how most novels have the original hosts die pathetic ways), but as I read further, I found out that long tian had an alteration and thus died.
'It seems you are really courting death! Just wait, you will die a dog's death under my hands. That bitch will also kneel before me and beg for my forgiveness.'
Eastern · Odayaka
Sigh! Problem here is that he's good to his wife just to get experience. Before he got the system, he didn't even think of doing what he's doing now. It feels like if he got another way to efficiently gain experience, then he would just ignore his wife. It's just disgusting. I noticed other CN novels like that too. They systemize the relationships and offer rewards for pure emotions, completely dissociating feelings from the MC. He just feels like a level up machine.
Chen An was slightly excited. Then, he continued to be a bootlicker to his wife. He wanted to suck up to her in various ways and improve their relationship as much as possible.
Eastern · Little Overlord From Bamboo City
Regarding other questionable things. MC remembered previous body owner falling down in one paragraph and next paragraph it's how noah would tell mom that her son is dead, this makes us readers think he died cuz he fell over a rock. You could've just added "6 year old long tian fell. .. etc" and "14 year old long tian" to make us know that that memory had nothing to do with his thoughts about telling mom.
'It seems you are really courting death! Just wait, you will die a dog's death under my hands. That bitch will also kneel before me and beg for my forgiveness.'
Eastern · Odayaka
dropped at chapter 7
It wasn't bad, but it wasn't good either. There are no major problems with English. The main problems here are the progression of the story and the skewed rational behind each decision. Plot armor is so ridiculously cliche, even CN novels are better than this. - While on a walk MC bought a ring that somehow was the key to a grand legacy? - MC upgrading his mana so much that he should've exploded but instead was given notice of vitality going down until death, now why wouldn't he feel pain if he's constantly taking damage? - MC has a loving father, but MC being trashy just had to target his step moms. - MC has lust for brain, but that doesn't excuse him being so dull. His personality is boring. He doesn't have anything special about him personality wise. - No one questions how MC has sudden powerups. - MC doesn't plan nor think of how to use his system properly nor how to actually use strategy to turn situations around. If MC has a problem with a girl, plot armor will kick in and get her into trouble then MC will save her and thus could bed her. Why can't MC use his brain and create trouble himself then save her? It just seems that this story is about an average guy with no remarkable qualities but has a system. He just goes with the flow without thinking ahead. Even if author focuses on the story, then it's mostly plot armor pushing the story ahead, cuz MC won't do shit.
Strongest Mage with the Lust system
Fantasy · Blizzard54k