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We have a right to complain when we are hundreds of chapters deep with next to zero development in his strength. I’m down for a slow grill, but at this rate we aren’t gonna be seeing the completion of this book for the next decade (literally).

Author, I’m gonna tell it to you straight, but I’m about 150 chapters deep, and we don’t need so many R18 scenes, especially ones that are the same thing over and over and over again with a slight variation. It’s ok to just mention it happening in a sentence or 2, then move on. I think this is also really slowing down the story progression in comparison to the amount of chapters. Also, why do you keep using “well that will be a story for another time”. I’m not even half way through the book and it’s been used like 7 or 8 times XD

Really a great story, highly recommend. Errors here and there, and I do see some overuse of some words, but it’s minor and expected, and its impact on the reading quality is minimal to none. Definitely deserves more love then what it’s getting right now, and I’m excited to see how this story progresses.

Author, I need to ask. Is what’s seen in the extras the future end of the story? What Victor will reach and get. Or will he go beyond that. I think it would be pretty cool that the whole reason he is being protected is to do something/not have something happen that limits him or stops him from being able to do something. Either way, don’t know if it’s the best to spoil the ending (even if it’s just a little), as that takes out so much of the mystery, but I trust you’ll get this done in the best way possible.

Not completely against yuri, but the story stops being about him. He’s the main character, it’s supposed to be about him. But now he is just a side character. The yuri is excessive putting it mildly , and his character development is horrible, don’t know what else to tell you.

It’s alright at best, my confuse is at chapter 30 something everything gets new names. Pretty sure it’s a rewrite but there is zero indication of what’s what, I’m so confused rn.

Not to mention literally ever since problem involving his girls emotional spectrum is solved by sex or a kiss. Like they might love him a shit ton, but sex or a kiss doesn’t make all the issues go away. Makes zero sense.

MC is a retard. Doesn’t address the root of his issues, and keeps bringing more on himself. He already made like all of his girls have a mental break down learning about each other, gets shot, makes them have another one, and then goes “you know what I should do, bring another girl to live with me” and thinks things will just work out when his girls still haven’t even recovered from the previous 2 incidents . Like what? Does he like have zero common sense on how emotions works? No wonder why he couldn’t do jack shit without the Ero Meter, he’s a total idiot. Not to mention all of the supernatural occurrences. He keeps saying “this has to stop” or “ima put an end to this”, and 2 paragraphs later he’s back into his emotional train wreck off a life. It was a good story until the super natural stuff was introduced, and it’s just the plummeted since then.

So has this been dropped? Either way good novel. Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!Word count!

Oh and on another side note, hope the whole being controlled (emotionally) by his family stops, or is at least limited. Sure. respect your elders, and also I agree that “living life on your own terms” is pretty much a fantasy, but I just don’t find it entertaining seeing the MC get almost manipulated like this. Either way, nice book author

Im at chapter 46, and it’s pretty interesting. Though I do hope this family bs will mostly clear up soon, as frankly, it isn’t what I’m here to read. It’s definitely unique, and so far extremely well written, but this isn’t “My Journey To Become A Crime Boss”, but “Titan Rising Online: World Breaker”. Either way, great story and a whole lot of potential, but I just hope the story doesn’t go down a emotional rabbit hole, but stays on track.

Love the book, but I have a potentially suggestion for the ending (don’t worry about it if you have plans). Maybe he grows on power, and the book ends off with him entering the main reality, but immediately cuts off the moment he enters as the author (people like you) can’t actually affect the humans of Earth. Idk, thought it would be cool. (And if he does, making him bring the girls too). Either way, thanks for your time

Love the story, but is it on hiatus? If so, when do you think you will get back to it? Don’t wanna dive into this masterpiece again only to be left on a massive cliff hanger. Thanks for your time

Don’t know how to fell about him wanted life on “hard mode”, just doesn’t make a whole lot of sense. It will never be hard mode, as there is a 0% of them letting him die, so what’s the point of all this? Idk, nothing inherently wrong with it, just feels like it adds a lot of nothing to something that doesn’t need it.

And it’s not like they are with him but just did some bed play, they are in a relationship

Between his sister and his female best friend, wouldn’t say he’s a cuck but I still just can’t

Author, quick question, will our MC stay in the film business or is this just until he’s rich enough to support everyone doing whatever they want. I don’t mind it for a bit, but I think there should be a limit. Either way, great story, keep on writing.

Question, so is there like an infinite time paradox of MC going to the past and the events of this story following? Because that’s what im kinda getting here, but not sure.

Also author, do you plan to keep MC out of anything more then a father with his daughters or will that eventually happen. And if it does, do you plan to let Joy and Destiny be apart of that or no because of their relationship.