Keeptheball

Thanks a lot for your help man. Feedback like yours helps.

Thanks a lot for the review and for having read this far. I do agree with your criticism. I've already had to rewrite the first volume because of the long-windedness and I was planning to do the same with the second volume. If you will allow me one question, would you say the "tedious and garrulous" writing style was too much too bear even in the first volume? Thanks for your time.

best review so far

Thanks for the review. If you have time, I could use your help: Are we clear its up to the 8th chapter that my text is a pain in the ass to read? After the 8th chapter, you said things get much better, so I can understand I don't have to go out of my way the rest right? Also, I always thought the prologue was pretty well written. Do you include it (first 3 chapters) in your analysis of the first chapters? As I understand it, the longwindedness of the first chapters is the main issue, right? Thank you very much!