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Great Story thus far. A little too quick in pacing in my opinion due to the 5 year time skip where nothing to the reader's knowledge occurred that was worth while. I would probably recommend when you do the rewrite like you said that you don't just completely skip that time and maybe add a bit of his efforts during this time. Maybe he does a bit of classical theatre acting or a couple of gigs at bars. It just seems like 5 years is a bit excessive time skip in a world without supernatural ability or an ability to extend his life even if it is realistic.

I see so its a wiki of what? I guess I will try to google it. When I googled SCP by itself it brought me to a bunch of random things that were unrelated to fiction. My first point still stands btw. IF you do not know what SCP is you are just thrown into the deep end. I kind of likened it in my mind to X-Files or a Law and Order set up, maybe even creepy pasta. Also there is no SCP tag so going in I simply thought it was a cross-over multiversal story. The only mention of SCP in your summary is at the end and only briefly. I found your story going to the Fanfiction then most recent and figured I would give it a try. I wasn't trying to complain either. I was simply giving criticism letting you know a flaw in your style. I agree with your point about you should be allowed to assume its a fanfic of this so you don't have to explain but you have a tag for FGO and FGO is in your title so I thought that, that was going to be the main world thus i assumed it was a fanfic of FGO not some SCP. I know what waifu catalog is as it is rather prevalent here on webnovel but before encountering it a few times I had no idea what it was outside of my assumption due to the words being pretty good descriptors.

Entering the story if you do not know SCP (like myself) you have no understanding what is going on. There is no real explanation of what is going on just horrific event after horrific event. No explanation of characters appearance outside of their fingernails. Knowing that SCP - and having no previous understanding or where to find the source - is the majority of this story as of current, I find the story lacking as a fanfiction. I know recently a new arc for FGO has begun but the question stands do i need to read the previous arc to read the new one? If not then why is it a continuation of the story? If yes then I would say it was executed poorly for anyone who doesn't have canon knowledge.

Had me reading it with intrigue till chapter 9 which is left field weird kinda like M.Night. Shamalan films. Hick ups in translation or the author doesnt know how language works. The story actually has a great pacing in my opinion. They rely on character design and world background of the original work until chapter 9. At the moment I am not sure this is transformitive enough to legally be called a fanfiction.

The romance written for the harem is absolutely horrid. Dude has been imprisoned for a long time and yet he loves them and they believe it. Hormones I get. Love at first sight even but that they believe his words is bs.

I will give it another try. Maybe after getting some sleep. Like I said though, apart from the style I didn't have much of an issue with the story with the exception of that one remark about the chakra and the time skip. Which I could argue with myself to say is negligible since you could always explain that later. The two best first person points of view (which is what you were using but in my opinion a poor style) are in the perspective of a nostalgic MC telling the story similar to How I Met Your Mother or written like the MC is writing a letter to someone or a writing in their Diary.

Im not a fan of the style of story telling. It is told as if whoever's point of view it is in is speaking to the reader and is immersion breaking. I wouldn't mind if it was every now and then but the whole story up to the 4th chapter (where I quit reading) is written like the MC is perpetually breaking the fourth wall. No description of the MC and the World Background is already existent so they just chose a timeline. English is written well so if it is a translation, it is done amazingly. I feel like instead of forgoing the reincarnator's perspective on chakra that it could have filled up the 6 month time skip spot where the previous chapter was really short.