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In Harry Potter with OTS System
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What would happen to a guy that died out of rage while in a Guild War?
What would the choice of some bored dimensional being who catches his soul in the middle of his way to the afterlife?
What would happen when the guy's addiction mixes with the Wizarding World of Harry Potter!? What chaos would that bring to the world!?
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Well, this was an idea I had like a week ago, and wanted to try it out on my journey to learn how to write. So, here it is. It's another fanfic, yes. Because it's easier to write.
Also, with this one, I'll probably post only during the weekends, not daily like with the Novel's Extra's Extra. Firstly because I want to finish the other one, and also because I need to research a lot more (I'm not that knowledgeable in Harry Potter.)
As usual, any feedback and criticism will be well received, and thanks for reading!
Will be posting this in Royal Road and Scribble Hub too.
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If the author update this constantly then this story would be one of the best hp fanfics of all time. There are only 4 chapters at this point but the story has amazing potential. As writing quality, narration, mc's personality are excellent. I'm just hope that author doesn't drop this too soon. Ps. Good work author.
Bored out of your mind and just strolling rankings or the Recently Updated section? STOP what you're doing and go read this fanfic!! Long chapters? Check System? Check Mc transmigrated with knowledge of the plot and isn't stupid? Check Will he follow canon? We're not there yet but sure hope not OP? Check We aren't at the plot so I can't say anything about how the mc will affect the story, but the start is interesting and it caught my attention.
Boring, the same story and the same dialogues. Mc is boring. Crying bitch with a "xianxian tragic" past.............................................................................................................
Retard main character,.......................................... 🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃🙃
MC idiot .........................................................................................................................................................
It was great at start TBH but after first year everything falls apart, Second year is completely skipped by author whole second year is wrapped in 4-5 chapters and Mc just stops improving his stats saying he is already powerful and voldy is still not a problem yet. His start of third year his ML and points are barely any different from his first year stats. I get that Author made him a bit too op in first year but to not improve in second year at all just to nerf him is just not done.
Well, although it was interesting, there were too many disappointments so I can't really force myself to keep reading. There were too many cliches, a couple of cringe moments and a mc that just seems to be unable to stay out of trouble even though he himself was the one who said to keep a low profile and grow in power first. So yeah, although I think this novel deserves a better rating than this, these ratings represent my disappoint over this novel
I'm soo upset I found this fanfic too early. If only I found it two months later.Now Imma have to wait for chapters to come out.😩😩😩😩😩😩😩😩😩
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this story is very good and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will continue onwards, so please keep up the good work ..
W. Q.: The most lacking part of the novel so far. It has a lot of grammatical errors and makes reading quite difficult at times. Not the worst, as a single edit could fix most of it, but yeah. S. o. U.: Almost daily apart from when the Author has his own issues. S. D.: Progressing nicely along. Still in the first year of Hogwarts but there's a lot more to explore. C. D.: The character so far is very likeable. He has brains and makes use of any exploit he can find. W. B.: What can I say, I love HP Keep up the good work.
Great story so far. The author is a great writer with a really unusual and new system that i was not familiar with but is interesting. The descriptions of magic and the system are precise and fun to read. I hope you develop more the main character relationships.
i hate that i found this book so soon. it may have some bad parts but the majority of the book is great. good job mister author and i hope you increase your updates
Updates are fast. Writing is readable. Character's are likeable.The world so far is a good AU. A fantastic story.
I don't typically review a story till a fanfic reaches around 30 chapters, however this one changed my mine. Despite all the childish and poorly written fanfics out there that gets five stars when its really nothing but a pile of garbage, this one is not it. The author actually puts thought and consequences to actions. While the mc is strong he is not op. There are drawbacks to the powers and has a lot of potential. My only hope is that the author expands further into the world of Harry Potter past the school years. Most rarely ever explore the world.
I'm dropping this story due to my character, let me explain. generally speaking I dislike MCs (or ppl in general) that devalue themselves."I'm an idiot" etc are examples for this. let me give you a piece of life advice. If a person is bullied, ask yourself: what makes them the bullied person instead of someone else? What are people's intention when they act in certain ways? The answers usually come with experience in life yet one has to start asking the correct questions in order to keep bettering themselves. Life often is hardship and only by acknowleding that you are doing something wrong you can better yourself. The missing depth of Character shows that you don't yet know about the coherency in human behavior. An example I'd give you is that the MC "works hard" to improve themselves, yet doesnt have enough self-respect and toughness to be a person that's willing to through the process of doing things they don't like doing.(discipline). He is like a feather in the wind with no goals aside from "better stats in magic" and just keeps floating wherever the wind may take him. Humans like that tend to be lazy (if they can) and stop moving forward in face of hardships. Therefore they'd stop bettering themselves at an acceptable level. This is just a generalization but I hope you get the point and keep improving.
How many floors should a bag of rice stand, how many floors should a bag of rice stand, how much should you pay for a bag of rice, how much should a bag of rice be washed, each grain is muddy, who gave you a bag of rice! Spicy Tiansai! ! !
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